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Megaera Callisto Lorenz

"Millie -- Part 2" by Megaera Callisto Lorenz

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This is the second chapter of the 'Millie' story.
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After tea, and more unsuccessful questioning of Dr. Dupris, I retired home, my mind awash in questions. I barely slept that night, for I was too consumed with excitement. What was the mechanism? On the one hand, I still could not believe that a machine was capable of human thought or free will. And yet, I could not dismiss the evidence of my own eyes. The more I thought of Millie, the more baffled I was. I could think of no possible mechanism of deception that would account for what I had seen. She answered my questions, moved about on her own . . .

Two days later, I received a letter from my cousin, Constance:

My Dearest Henry,

Willie and I are hosting a dance to-morrow night, and you are of course invited.
I know that you find such events vexing, but you really must get out more. There
will be several eligible young ladies present, and I am sure you will have no
trouble finding a dance partner. Please do come.

Your Loving Cousin, Constance

I had always been close to Constance, although of late I found her rather overbearing. She had met Willie and married when she was no more than sixteen, and I eighteen. I was now thirty-five, and still a bachelor. Constance was so fretful of my single life that she might as well have been my mother.

I was racking my brain to devise a suitably convincing “previous engagement” when a sudden inspiration struck me. I leapt to my feet, clapping my hands in delight. “Of course I will come to your dance, dear Constance,” I said to myself. “And I will have no need to seek the attentions of any of those eligible ladies.”

I rushed at once to the house of Dr. Dupris. He welcomed me cordially, and this time Elsie took my coat. She seemed to be in an exceptionally poor mood, and did not greet me with her usual good cheer.

“What is troubling Elsie?” I asked when we were seated in the parlor.

Jonathan shook his head and sighed. “I’m afraid she doesn’t like Millie very well,” he said. “She is rather odd, so I suppose it is only to be expected. And I’m sure Elsie did not appreciate an automaton moving in on her duties in the downstairs parlor!”

I laughed. “How is Millie doing?” I asked him.

“So far as I can tell, quite well,” he replied with a shrug of his shoulders. “She is not one to discuss her feelings much.” Then his eyes lit up again. “But you know, I discovered something quite amazing about her the other day. She senses when she is about to wind down, and she demands to be wound up again! I am quite sure that she would be perfectly capable of keeping herself going forever if she could obtain a copy of the key. I know she is able to wind herself.”

“Where is she now?” I asked, looking around for her. I was somewhat disappointed that she had not already presented herself.

“She is not running at the moment,” said Dr. Dupris. “I built her with a switch that disengages her mechanism, so that she can be switched off at any given moment.”

“Why, that’s capital!” I exclaimed, slapping my knee. “Perhaps I should marry her. I could live with a wife that I could switch off.”

Jonathan laughed uneasily, and then said, “Well, Henry, my boy, I’m afraid she wouldn’t like it much if you made a habit of it.” He shook his head, his brow furrowing with concern. “She was quite upset about it when I went to disengage her to-day. I assured her that it would not be permanent, and that I thought her clockwork needed a rest now and then, but . . .” He shook his head again.

“Will you start her up again?” I pressed eagerly. “I have been dying to speak to her. I must give you credit -- she is quite fascinating!”

“Very well,” he said, raising himself with some reluctance from his comfortable seat. He began to move towards the stairs, and then stopped with one hand on the railing, a thoughtful expression coming over his features. "She can be so very difficult sometimes," he remarked. "Do you know, the other day I found her in the act of completely dismantling a lovely little music-box that I used to keep on the mantlepiece in the guest room. She had all of the little gears and mechanisms spread out before her. I asked her what the devil  she was doing, and she said that she wanted to see how it worked."

I grinned. "Clever old thing, isn't she?" I mused. Jonathan nodded pensively, and then went on his way. I was left alone, rubbing my hands together in anticipation.

In a few moments, I heard footsteps. I stood and watched as Millie walked down the flight of stairs slowly, but with a sure step. Dr. Dupris stood just behind her, watching her carefully. “Very good, my dear,” he assured her. “You’re doing quite well.”

When they had arrived at the bottom of the stairs, Millie approached me, curtseyed, and said, “How do you do, Mr. Kaufmann.”

I clapped with delight. “You really do remember me, then!” I exclaimed. “I am feeling very well, Millie. I came to see you because . . .” I glanced at Jonathan, not knowing how he would react to my proposal. “You see,” I said, now addressing my friend, “I have been invited to a dance, and I wondered if I might take Millie.”

His bushy eyebrows shot up in surprise. “Oh, my dear Henry!” he exclaimed. “I really don’t know that it would be such a good idea to expose her to the public at this point.”

“Come now,” I said, grinning. “She would be such a sensation! It would be wonderful publicity for your presentation. Just a sample, to whet the public appetite . . .”

Jonathan frowned down at his feet, biting his lip. “I’m reluctant, Henry. What if something should go wrong?”

“What could go wrong?” I asked.

“I did not want to expose her at all before my presentation . . .”

During this conversation, Millie had once again lapsed into complete stillness. Now her lovely, dark-haired head turned with a sudden whirr of gears as she fixed her gaze on Jonathan. The bellows hissed quietly, and she said, “You will let me go, Dr. Dupris.”

He met his creation’s stare with a further raising of the eyebrows. “You seem quite eager to go, Millie!” he said.

Millie merely turned her head back to me, blinking slowly. I looked back at Jonathan hopefully.

“Well,” he said grudgingly, “there is no point in arguing with a lady. I suppose she may go. But you will have to bring me along, as well. I want to keep an eye on her.”

I nodded jovially. “Of course, of course!” I replied. “I’m sure Constance would be delighted to have you. The more the merrier, as far as she’s concerned.”

←- Millie -- Part 1 | Millie -- Part 3 -→

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18 Jan 2003:-) E. Hanna
Even more foreshadowing: excellently done, too. You slip the two killed dogs in so off-handedly the reader almost dismisses them- clever. You've built up anticipation for the party rather nicely. I'd have italicized the letter from Constance but it's just a technical detail.

I'm feeling a very fragile dove/deadly killer paradox vibe from Millie. You've carried the feeling through her dialogue without stating it directly, making it subtle and thus more disturbing. Very well done.

:-) Megaera Callisto Lorenz replies: "Thank you again! I'm glad that Millie is giving off the appropriate vibes at this point. 2 I'm planning to edit the formatting and republish at some point, since the transition from Word to html destroyed a lot of it. I'll be sure to italicize Constance's letter when I do that . . ."
23 Jan 2003:-) San3
Constance wrote "your" instead of you at one point, and I do not agree that the snapped dogs' necks was put in offhandedly. No one is going to dismiss that, but I'm also not sure how you could work it in more smoothly. Perhaps by just mentioning that they talked about it at some point, rather than actually having us see the conversation. That tends to minimize or mute important points. But maybe you don't WANT it subtle, so forget that.

And the deadly killer/innocent dove thing is perfect, especially now. I cannot decide if she is absolutely evil or not. The fact she doesn't have a key and hates being shut down already is sending chills down my spine.

:-) Megaera Callisto Lorenz replies: "Ah, yes, I still need to weed out a few typos. I completely agree about the dogs. I'm thinking I might take them out, at least in this short version of the tale. When I put that detail in there, the plot I had in mind was somewhat different. I'm glad the ambivalence with Millie is coming through. I think that's so much creepier than pure evil. 2"
4 Apr 200345 Artanis
You took out the dogs? or did I miss something?
I like Millie a lot-She's a really intruiging character
^-^ Although she gives me chills, too.

:-) Megaera Callisto Lorenz replies: "Oops . . . Yep, I took out the dogs. It just seemed a little too obvious and heavy-handed. I replaced them with the music-box part. I'm glad you like Millie . . . I had a blast writing her!"
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About 'Millie -- Part 2':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Megaera Callisto Lorenz
 • Copyright: ©Megaera Callisto Lorenz. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Android, Automaton, Horror, Victorian
 • Categories: Techno, Cyber, Technological, A.I. (Artificial Intelligence)
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