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Victoria Lia Yu

"A Great and Terrible Beauty" by Victoria Lia Yu

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An unfortunate maiden that put her trust in the wrong man's hands. He changed her into something she never hoped to be.
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The dark night, as oil and coal,

The pale maiden like a porcelain doll.

She sat at the riverside,

Waiting waiting,

For her lover to appear, to carry her away.

 

And in the distance, as the clock striked twelve,

The thumping of hooves, came faint but clear.

Her golden locks, like the harvested wheat,

Blew in the wind to the hoovesĄŻ beat.

 

On the stallion, her lover came,

Eyes like sapphires, and lips so enticing.

For his gaze rested only on her,

And nothing else.

 

They sat together, tangled among robes and shawls,

Watching the stars as they twinkled.

With a hand in silky hair she longed to touch,

She asked, Do you love me?

 

Of course, my eyes hold only you.

 

Giggling, resting her head against his shoulder,

She felt his warm touch around her waist.

If you love me, prove it.

 

Without a word,

He pushed her down,

Leaning above,

Panting hard.

 

As you wish.

 

He lowered a hand to the small of her back,

The other, gentlely in her hair.

Lips locked, she could not breathe,

She didnĄŻt care, for she held him dear.

 

Slowly and softly,

Her mind was unclear.

She could no longer tell if he was still there,

Warm liquid gushed from inside.

 

Stunned and shocked, she twitched in pain,

Gasping harshing like her life counted on it.

A sudden prick, she felt like a wreck

Two holes were on her delicate neck.

 

You asked for love, here it is.

 Now you truly are mine.

His sapphire eyes turned ruby red,

The color of blood, the color of their lust.

 

She turned to the river,

Terror struck with the blood,

And in the river she shrieked,

For she no longer knew the girl it showed.

 

Eyes that glowed silver like the moon,

Lips, red as his eyes, like the bloody white rose she held,

Her skin as pale as it was,

Translucent like the moon itself.

 

Like this rose you are beautiful, so fragile and lovely, he said.

 

Before she could utter a protest,

His teeth dug deep down her throat,

Draining her of all mortality.

She felt nothing, saw nothing,

but the crushed rose in her hands.

 

Like that bloody white rose,

Once pure and untouched,

Now tainted and formidable,

For that is what is means to be

A great and terrible beauty.

 

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DateNameComment 
10 Nov 2008:-) Ria Susan Witteman
cool. was there a rhyme or beat? coz i didnt see one. interesting idea. a great and terrible beauty is already the name of a book btw.
18 Nov 2008:-) Natalie Adams
wow......really graphic, very tragic!!!! Very intense! 22
21 Nov 2008:-) Lydia stephanie Barker
man....i am in awe of your talent. this is beautifuly done. this is going into my fav’s...thank you
31 Dec 200845 Anonymous muffin maker
this is the first example of your work i’ve seen, and i love it!! some of the phrases in there really ring in my ears. like...
"For she no longer knew the girl it showed." nice imagery! i can see her reflection...all pale and vampirey...
"The dark night, as oil and coal,
The pale maiden like a porcelain doll.
She sat at the riverside,
Waiting waiting,
For her lover to appear, to carry her away."
good mix of narrative and poetry, i like the rhythm of this stanza.
*gives muffin* wow! the moderators should see this!
~enjoy the muffin~
13 Jun 2009:-) Yukimi Mills
I’m in awe.
At first, I nodded as I recited this aloud (habit of mine when reading poetry and song) - taking it for another, although admittedly brilliant-written, love poem, but as it progressed, I had to pause - for no words could come at how startled I was! In a very, very good way! Your writing is definitely captivating, and this is among my favorite poetry I’ve read. (I’m no poet, though, so I can’t give any critique if you’re looking for it. ^^; My apologies,it seems perfect to me.)

:-) Victoria Lia Yu replies: "Why thank you! To render my reader speechless was not what I expected. Seems like "Terrible Beauty" is getting a lot of nice feedback. 2 I love your gallery as well. Been there before I was a member, and just stumbled across it again only a day or so ago. Makes me miss some of the really good art you’ve done. Keep up the art and more updates! 1"
8 Aug 2009:-) Anna Zebrastar Rose
Poor girl. That was really well written. I could see everything happening as it did.
1 Sep 200945 Anon.
this is great, the imagery was very moving I especially liked the rose. keep up the good work.
4 Sep 2009:-) Jayd xAngelxWingsx Greenwood
omg. WOW
6 Oct 200945 Anon.
I don’t normally read poetry, but WOW this was good!
7 Oct 2009:-) Hannah elivabeth dougan
i never read poetry because i’m not very good at it. as i raed this it gave me amazing ideas for my gcse art work thank you 2 han
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About 'A Great and Terrible Beauty':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Victoria Lia Yu
 • Copyright: ©Victoria Lia Yu. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Vampires, Moon, Night time, Changed, Bloody rose
 • Categories: Romance, Emotion, Love, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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