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"Leviathan" by Musty Zein

SF&F Picture 1 out of 2 by Musty Zein

Well this is a poem about the leviathan. It heavily draws from some stuff in the book of job.

Let the night be silent and solitary
Let no joyful cry be heard
Let them curse it, Let them curse the day
When they are ready to awake the Leviathan

Swimming in the abyss waiting
Waiting for the end of days
Hugest of living creatures.
The twisting serpent swims in the deep
Wallowing in an ocean tempest
That’s where the leviathan waits

I dare you, Lay you hand upon him
And quiver as you feel his beautiful skin
For none is so brave that will dare to stir him
So who then is able to stand before him?
Who can open the doors of his face?

To stand before his unyielding force
To bare witness to his teeth so terrible,
stand before his red leering eyes and tremble

His scales are his pride, so close together
no air can come between them.
stuck together tight and firm
they cannot be sundered.
Out of his mouth burst burning torrents,
sparks of fire leaping out.

The sword that reaches him cannot prevail
Neither the spear or javelin can succeed
The arrow cannot make him flee
For mortal weapons he does not fear

For he is the leviathan, the dragon of revelation
Spreading his wings, either side
the king over all the children of pride.

←- Lilith | Lilith -→

Date	Name	Comment
25 Sep 2006	James Edward McGrath	Loading... Not bad. Didn't have the flow of the syphony of death but still pretty cool. Musty Zein replies: "Thanks for the comment"
1 Oct 2006	Emma Kathryn McDonald	Loading... Wow, very "epic fantasy"...powerful, much like the leviathan itself. Great stuff keep it up, and thanks for all the comments!!! Love your style it really captures that sort of taste of old medieval fantasy which I think has been quite lost. Well done! Lotsaluv, Em...that crazy Nightwish girl Musty Zein replies: "Ah your too kind, thanks for your comment"
6 Oct 2006	Linda M. Billson	Loading... Very well done! It's not a rhyming poem, but not all poetry rhymes. I can definitely tell it's inspired by Job. Your poem paints a picture of the leviathan that sticks in my brain. Good job! Musty Zein replies: "Thanks, I'm glad my poem paints a clear picture of the leviathan. thanks for your comment"
14 Oct 2006	Edward Ramirez	Loading... Very smooth description. For some reason I thought that the strongest part of the poem was the first half. Only because the imagery of the deep abyss always fascinated me. The funny thing is it's almost a deep fear. Of all the different scenarios of darkness on can be in, I find being the ocean's abyss the most scary. Total darkness, crushing pressure, not being able to breathe, and at the same time, you don't know what dwells within while you do know your completely helpless. To think, that a creature that can adapt to such extremes is almost close to...invincible. So yah, good poem! Musty Zein replies: "Yea, the leviathan has to be pretty tough if only God can destroy it lol. Thanks for the comment "
18 Oct 2006	Meaghan Carmichael	Loading... wows awesome poem...huggles u dances around u like a nymph scares u away...NOT Musty Zein replies: "lol glad you like the poem and thanks for your comments"
18 Dec 2006	Holly JimbobJaroo Holdsworth	Loading... Good poem. The leviathan sounds like a different creature from the one in greek mythology... Who cares?!?! Takes out freshly baked cookies and sone milk For you. And... takes out freshly killed cow For your little friend in the poem. Why don't you take him to the park? The kids would love him. And he would love playing with them! Take his chew-toy! Musty Zein replies: "Lol thanks, the leviathan in this poem is based on biblical mythology so it would be slightly different.chomps on the milk and cookies and cooks the cowOh, the leviathan can have the children when I take him out for his walk in the park..."
29 Dec 2006	Taylor R. Brown	Loading... Nice poem. Very cool. I like the sound of this leviathan. Nice description and what not. I like the first stanza and how it sorta gets you into the poem and all. I’d hate to be around when the leviathan dose wake. Musty Zein replies: "Thanks, glad you liked it. Indeed, you wouldnt want to be around when it awakes...'cus that means its the end of the world! (well, according to some scriptures...) "
9 Mar 2007	Sarah-amy haley	Loading... So beautiful and descriptive. Very nice. Musty Zein replies: "Thanks!"
26 Apr 2007	Alyssa R. Watson	Loading... I really like this poem, its almost from a fairy tale or something, its really good. Musty Zein replies: "Thanks, I was going for more of an 'epic simile from milton' sorta thing but fairy tale is just as good XD. Thanks for your comments"
26 Dec 2007	Karolien V Burms	Loading... a nice poem, I like your style. the images you give are strong and lasting. they leave room for the readers imagination and that's a very good thing. nice work! Musty Zein replies: "Thank you, I'm glad you liked the style. Personally I didnt think the imagery was too great but thanks for the comment, much appreciated. "
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