"Vampire Complete" by Nancy Lavoie

The shading looks pretty good, and she has some very sassy, seductive clothes, but the perspective and proportions could use some work.

Speaking in terms of the entire body, her head does look to be a little too large for her neck and shoulders, and her left arm (our right) looks a little too small. Her "clawing" hand could also use some work: The thumb looks too high on the palm, almost making it look like a 6th finger, and the creases in the palm look unnatural and arbitrarily placed. The best way to practice drawing hands is to use a photo-reference, or perhaps look for books/tutorials on little tips and tricks.

The face has a lot of potential, and the white eyes are a great, vampiric touch. However, they do look to be a little to large for her face. Also, her cheekbones and jawline don't seem to match up very well. Her lips and fangs look a little unnatural. If she's opening her mouth up like that to reveal her fangs, her bottom lip wouldn't make such a dip into upper lip.

As for the perspective, what really seems off is the angle of the road. It almost looks like it's going downhill, but the buildings look like they're on a very level surface.

This picture has a lot of potential, especially with the shading. The best thing to do right now would probably be to use some photo-references so you can get a better idea of what should be where and whatnot. Keep it up!

Nancy Lavoie replies: "  WOW! Now that,s what I call constructive critism! First Of all, I really want to thank you for it. It's really hard to improve when you are all by yourself and you are the only judge of your work.

Ok, I admit, I really really had a hard time with the hands on her. The original (the first skecht) was probably 10 time worst!
As for the eyes, this is one of my major problem... I love them to look wide and large .
For the lips, I must agree . But I'm still proud of them anyway cause they are more realistic than on the other majority of my drawings.
and finnaly (hihihi) for the Background. I notices the street was a problem but did'nt knew how to fix it... probably just remove the lines. If you ever have teh chance to come back... what do you think of the texture in the bricks?? and the dumpster... I had a lot of critism about this part.

Anyway, thanks a lot again, I'll go take a look at your art very soon (when my exam period will end)"

Well, I've made my way back, so I'd be more than happy to give opinions on the trash can and bricks.

I think the bricks look pretty good; there's a decent amount of texture in them and the shading there looks good. The trash can has some potential, but it lacks some detail and the right shading to give it a metallic look. I struggle with metallic and "shiny" objects myself, but I think a good way to do that is to use a good contrast between intense lights and darks.

Nancy Lavoie replies: "I see your point... Thanks for all your advices, theyare really precious And is hall use them wisely. I can't draw right now, but I plan to do more and more background in the future. Again, Thanks a lot"

I like the concept of this work very much, It does have a few areas that could use a bit of ironing out. Her head is a bit too big for the body overall. I think you could get away without the cheekbones, that may well be personal taste so if it suits you I fully understand. Other than that the arm on her hip got a little smallish past the elbow, and one of her legs is a bit thicker than the other. I like the variance of the grey tones here, nothing is really lost amongst the other objects, I find that a bit hard when using greys myself. Maybe you can do another of her in the future, if you do let me know =D

Nancy Lavoie replies: "This comment is one I love!! I love to get constructive critism and this is one. ok so I already knew for the head For the cheekbones, it's just that they are apparent when you try to open wide your mouth, maybe I should make them a little bit more shaded. I also agree with the arm, it should be fixed. And finally for the leg, it's simply that's it's not the same angle, one is seen from the front and the other is rotated to the exterior (sorry if my english was bad on this sentence). I will for sure try to do more drawing like this in the future, I just need mroe time, more patience and well, some inspiration cause I'm in a total blank right now. Anyway, It was a pleasure to read all teh comemnts you have left for me, I'm thankfull"