| 15 Oct 2005 | Anonymous | They are both very good, but the flow seems a little off on them. Maybe try a little re-writing and reading it aloud to check the flow? But don't ask me, my poems are VERY bad, so I wouldn't know! I like the "earth and hearth" one better but that's just me. The dragon one seems a little forced to me...
Whatever, I think they are very nice but could use a little work to make them perfect. Not much work, but a touch! Keep writing! | |