| 1 Jul 2004 |  Bryan C. D. Doyle | *Does first comment dance* Well one woord of advice, try to put dialouge into seperate paragraphs. Anyways i like you story. dident have time to read part two but i will try later. I hope you pay my little neck of the woods a visit. | |
| 12 Jul 2004 |  L. Koehn | wow.. I really like your story. Can't wait until you get some more parts up. Keep up the good work! btw.. This seems a little shameless, but I hope you visit my page  I could use the critique | |
| 10 Oct 2004 |  Nyssa E. Shaw | I love the story line! It's great, and it caught my attention right away. The only thing is, you didn't spend much time elaborating, it sounded as though you were just summarizing a few parts, especially when she meets the Prince, you never see what happened in the time between she met him, and the time they were caught! Some other stuff must have happened right! But I really like your story line, it has a lot of potential, and I hope you keep it going! Keep up the good work!
P.S. We share names! Yayy, all Nyssas rock! | |
