| 14 Mar 1999 | eric | Well blar'lo there. -- nice setup and cool stories. If you ever become a well known author i want an autographed copy...heh. See you in Philly. | |
| 14 Mar 1999 | Fine then- Tory, Loth 88 | YEY FOR PHIL! Sorry I not read stories righ' now.. kin'a busy, but I promise I WILL when I gots freetime! Pinkyswear. ~_^. Congrats tho, =) | |
| 15 Mar 1999 | Stephen M. Courtney | I just read over the comment I left: "...I think that your the bits you have here"...?!?! WTF??? Sorry, it's early... Yes, I is an writer! | |
| 15 Mar 1999 | Stephen M. Courtney | Right now, I think that your the bits you have here are too short too comment extensively on, but you've got a nice style, keep writing and post more! | |
| 17 Feb 2000 | Biz | I don't like this either..your prose, it seems like its forced or something, I dunno..or maybe you just try to hard, This is something I do know about, writing that is..You need more dialog and description imo, describe everything..thats the only way your reader can see and feel what your writing about, if you dont, you're just wasting space  | |
| 28 Mar 2000 | Babbsy | Why would you not write about the awesomw battle which must have taken place? You have left so much out..not worthy of any reward from the king..you act as though this guy kills dragons every other day,no big deal. and the king won't think so either. So much descriptive narrative you completely skipped!!!! | |
| 4 Apr 2000 | KoRn Kid | philadelphia-where the weak are killed and eaten, heh heh heh. the only reson i live here is the TASTYKAKES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! | |
| 10 Aug 2001 | Chelsey E. Eaton | I like your writing it's very good! Your use of description is great. | |