| 17 Jul 2002 | Stephan P. Calloway | Welcome to the Library! I like your style a lot. I'd say your stories could be LONGER, but then ... mine aren't that great either so I'll just say that you leave the reader wanting more  Keep up the good work; I'll be back to look for updates. | |
| 22 Apr 2003 | Diana R. Marling | Okay, constructive criticism time. First, edit your stories. There are serious run-ons and fragments in them which distract from the language and flow. Second, it might help if you explained a little more what is supposed to happen in them. Right now, they are just vignettes without any real purpose or plot except to write out a single thought of yours. Are they supposed to be like that? If so, say it. You would like an artist, you said: try reading my stories, and check out my art. If you are interested, email me. Kudos. I like the work so far. Finally, another bisexual on Elfwood! | |