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"The Birth of an Assassin" by Kristen A. Pilcher

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Here's another story about Crow. It's rather short, only two pages or so. Enjoy and comment!
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White Crow: Ageless Assassin   Story #2  

“The Birth of an Assassin”

 

“Run, ****, run!” the voice screamed in her dream.  It was her father’s voice, racked with pain and dripping with insanity.  She could see the flames eating her house, eating him, eating her mother who lay broken and bleeding on the bed.  She heard other voices.  Men laughing, enjoying the pain they brought to others.  Laughing as her parents struggled to fight, to live.  And all the while she watched, helpless.  Innocent eyes, defiled, forever haunted by the images before her.  “Run, ****, run!”

            She screamed.  Her voice rang throughout the forest, waking animals and sending birds into the sky with fright.  She sat up from the forest floor and looked around.  All was peaceful, quiet, like the forest always was just before daybreak.  Her wide blue eyes took in every detail, from the different marks on the trees, to the way the pine needles lay beneath her.  She stared at the needles between her bare feet, trying to force her mind to be still.  But the images still remained.  They would never go away.

            A chocked sob escaped her lips as she let her head rest on her knees.  Tears streamed down her dirty cheeks unawares.  She wound her hands into her thick, tangled, white hair.  Suddenly, a heavy something landed on her shoulder.

            The dream again?” asked a soft male voice in her mind.

            She looked up and into the large black eyes of a white crow, “Yes, the dream.”  They sat in silence, neither moving, for a long time.  Then she looked up into the sky where the sun was making its first appearance for the day.  “How long has it been?”

            Does it matter?

            “No, I guess not.”

            Would it make you feel better if you knew?

            “No.  I can never feel better.  Everything is all wrong and can never be right again.”

            You’re wrong.

            “What do you mean?” she looked the crow in the eye.

            It can be made right.

            “How?” she asked, sitting up straight.

            You could get revenge.

            “What is… revenge?”

            Revenge is something you do to people, people who’ve hurt you.

            “How do you do revenge?” her voice was hesitant.

            You hurt them the way they hurt you.

            “You can do that to someone?”

            “You can do it to the men who killed your parents.

            She looked at the crow sharply, her eyes filling with pain and hatred, “How?”

            You kill them.

            “I can’t kill them!” she stood in an outrage, almost upsetting the crow off her shoulder.  “They’re too big and strong.”

            That doesn’t matter.  You are bigger and stronger than you were before.  You can kill them.  In the same way you kill rabbits.

            As this thought settled in her mind, her eyes began to glow with an unholy light.  The crow, sensing his danger, took flight and landed in a near by tree to watch.

            Her head lolled from side to side then snapped back on her neck.  Her back arched, arms spread, bare chest thrust out as a scream more terrifying than the first burst from her lips.  She leaped into the air and landed in a tree.  Like an ape, she swung from branch to branch, tree to tree, heading toward the white pulsating light that hovered in the middle of the forest.

            She paused before the light, feeling its heat.  It’s pulse quickened and the light slowly turned from white to dark, blood red.  She was so fascinated with the light that she did not notice as blood dripped from between her legs.

            With a wicked sneer and a laugh she jumped into the light.

 

 

She opened her eyes and looked straight into the noonday sun.  She closed them again and rolled onto her side as stabbing pains tore through her abdomen.  She whimpered and then vomited onto the forest floor.  She looked up into the trees until her eyes met with those of the crow.

            “What…?  What’s happening to me?”

            You’re a woman now.  No longer a little girl.  This is your womanhood.  This will repeat itself every full moon for the rest of your long life.

            She sat up and looked down at herself, at her blood caked legs, “Why am I bleeding?  Did I hurt myself?”

            No.  You have to bleed.  It is the blood that allows you to have babies.  It is the blood that will give you the strength, and the power, you will need in the years ahead.  For you are more than a woman now.  You are an assassin.

            “What’s an assassin?”

            A person who does revenge, someone who deals out justice.  A chosen one who is neither Good nor Evil, but is both.  An assassin is free.  An assassin is alone.  An assassin’s only friend, family, and lover is Death.

            Her eyes still glowed an unholy blue but they were slowly cooling.  So much so, that her eyes became like ice.  Piecing as a blade, dead as a glacier, but filled with knowledge and uncanny intelligence.  An impenetrable barrier went up in those eyes, and behind that wall of ice and steel hid the frightened little girl who had watched her parents murdered by Evil men.  There, that little girl wept as the woman never would, or could, again.

 

←- The Assassin's Lover Part 2 | Captured! -→

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29 Aug 2005:-) Micah A English
hm I agree with Tricia, usually by the age of 13 or so a kid would definitely have some concept of death, but yeah she wouldn't think she could kill someone bigger. This piece does go by really fast, as well. Maybe some other sense data, I saw mainly sight descriptions. And the transformation is kind of sudden, too.

10 Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "Let's face it people, I made it short for a reason. Plus, Crow doesn't even realize how old she is, she still thinks she 5 or so. And besides, it isn't me who's telling this story, it's Crow. I just write what I hear."
29 Aug 2005:-) Tricia L. Martin
So far pretty good. I can see this is setting up for a much longer story, but depending on how long you want this to go on, it feels a little fast paced. Like, for some reason this time- verses all the other times it sounds that she has had the dream- she gets the idea to go kill those who killed her parents. Why now? Why does the crow suddenly suggest it? That seems a little abrupt. Maybe make it sound like he's BEEN suggesting it and the idea gradually appeals to her more and more.

Also a couple spelling errors to note:
"A chocked sob escaped her lips" (choked)
"Piecing as a blade" (piercing)

Pretty good start- it is interesting but I encourage you to take your time and let it unfold slowly and naturally rather than try to jump through it too fast.

:-) Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "You have a good point. Crow's pretty young at this time, only about 13 or so, thus, before now, she was really too young to entertain the thought of killing people. Besides, this part had to be brief b/c what comes after is more important."
31 Aug 2005:-) Chelsea Stebar
You scare me, friend, you scare me. But I love you nonetheless. lol It does move a little fast, but it's not too bad, I guess. I don't have a whole lot else to say. I'm new at this writing thing, remember?

1 Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "I'm sorry that it scares you. My darker side tends to come out when I write. But it's all Crow's fault!"
9 Sep 2005:-) Julia Anna Rill
That is a really cool story! Just, what is the light she is jumping into?

Anyway, i like it a lot!

1 Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "Hehe, that's for me to know and you to find out, maybe... Thanks for the comment!"
2 Oct 2005:-) Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
*dances around in circles* THE WHITE CROW! another story about her i am so happy! I know this has been here a while but i have been overseas... anyways this was great... obviously the beginning of making her who she was before the other story. I love its great... back ground is always good to give a character more detail! *dances in happy circles*

1 Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "Teehee! I'm glad ytou like it! And I hope you'll like my next one too. It's another background type story, and I'm hoping it will be great!"
2 Oct 2005:-) Tom Nosredans
Hey a nice story to start, needs to be much longer though or whatever what do i know, over all nice job enjoyed it come visit me some time

2 Kristen A. Pilcher replies: "Yep, this one is extreamly short, but I meant it to be that way. I think it adds to the energy."
3 Apr 200845 Arael
awsome!!!! i hope to see more
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About 'The Birth of an Assassin':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Kristen A. Pilcher
 • Copyright: ©Kristen A. Pilcher. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Assassin, Revenge, Womanhood, Crow, Blood, Dream, Death
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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