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Rochelle Leya Watts

"Autumn Leaves and Ravens" by Rochelle Leya Watts

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Well a storm cloud of ravens who take people's souls is scary. Unless you're undead and have no soul. If you look around my gallery you'll see I kind of have a thing with ravens; must have been all the Nordic mythology as a child.
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Autumn Leaves and Ravens

The trees are bare of leaves
Every red, gold, orange, brown last one of them has been laid to rest
On the bare rocky ground
And now they only await the chill of winter

There stands a woman
Out along one thick branch
Of an old, old tree
Her arms held out to the twilight

In the distance the hush is broken
The sound of flapping wings, like a cackling wind
Rushes down the lane
Stirring up the lifeless leaves
And a shadow of crows pours from the sky

The shadow bulges and moves
In its little forms, losing a few feathers
Here and there
They thump against her body
Surrounding her with a heaving mass of black
Until she is lost from view

Somewhere far off a church bell tolls
Muted clangs echoing in the trees
And the dark fluttering cloud
Mutters in soft caws
Then, one by one
As if it were a puzzle being disassembled
They fly off in different directions

The few remaining, elders one supposes
Orbit in uncertainty
They cannot take her soul with them
Into the next world, as is expected
Because she is already dead

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20 Aug 2005:-) Julia Anna Rill
wow. cool one. and scary. i like the way you write! and i love ravens myself. not because of the nordic mythologies but because just of their appearance.

but why dont you have any comments on this one yet? its shocking!!!

another shocking thing: i live close to fields. and here are a lot of ravens and crows! now i will look differently to them when i see them... 10

:-) Rochelle Leya Watts replies: "Thanks. Hey, liking them for any reason is neat. You're lucky then to have them around; I live in a urban area and I see mostly pigeons. They don't quite inspire the mind the same as big black birds."
27 Sep 2005:-) Anya ´broom rider´ Kholodova
Oh. Very image-bearing. It's great, the way you tossed the images, the whole pictures one by one to the reader. No, not exactly scary, but so very dark - that's for sure. I love the poem.

:-) Rochelle Leya Watts replies: "Thanks. Images are my favorite parts of writing (major reason why I prefer poetry to prose; tends to have mostly images). I'm glad you liked it."
23 Oct 2005:-) Dan Shevock
I guess they don't call them a "murder of crows" for nothing. 2 I love your poetry style. Very visual. (thanks for reading my poems too)
I too live in an urban setting... However, I blessed with many crows, also pigeons (which I call doves) and even a Hawk... though I haven't seen the hawk, the neighbor kids saw it attack a dove one morning, and told me when I asked about the blood on my sidewalk.

:-) Rochelle Leya Watts replies: "Woot! You're my 50th commenter! Erm, as a prize would you like a poem or a story? Lol. A murder eh? Is that really what a group of crows is called? Neat. Certainly fits in my eyes to call a group of big black birds a murder. Hehe."
3 Nov 2005:-) Dan Shevock
yay, I won.
You're such a great writer. Hard decision.
a poem.
I'd be greatly honored. 2
21 Jun 2006:-) Tallulah 'Darkhorse' Cunningham
The elders of the aboriginies here in Central Australia get nervous when large flocks of crows (look the much the same as others continents but different species) come to call as they, like those in your poem, come for the spirits of the dying.

:-) Rochelle Leya Watts replies: "Austrailia has crow scariness too? Neat! Thanks for the comment!"
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About 'Autumn Leaves and Ravens':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Rochelle Leya Watts
 • Copyright: ©Rochelle Leya Watts. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Raven, Autumn, Tree, Woman, Dead, Soul, Cloud
 • Categories: Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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