|21 Feb 2003|| Karen *Maulana* Smith |
I really like this, very flowing and well written
|10 Jun 2003|| Zaikov|
Lovely work there...and the whole poem reads almost as if a spell of sorts, or a magic verse. Rochelle Leya Watts
replies: "It was not an intended effect but I should say I am pleased."
|29 Sep 2004|| Alice Muffin Girl Smith|
~ Slowly she turns and *smiled* < That just sorta bugged me, 'cause I didn't get why you switched tenses. Figured I'd point it out in case it was a mistake. ^_^
That's pretty cool... methinks me liked it. The mental image I got at "Slowly she turns and smiled/Hands out, murmuring softly" was just precious. Not to say that the whole thing didn't invoke a very fluid picture. ^_^ The broken line sorta style you used here really worked for me... who needs a sentence, when a word will do? Very cool. Don't think I've actually seen this style, before... but I like it. ^_^ *applause* Rochelle Leya Watts
replies: "Ooops. Never noticed that. ::::laughs::: And I wrote this when I was thirteen or so, you'd think I'd have seen this by now."
|18 Oct 2005|| Dan Shevock|
Another good poem. I had to sit with this one for a while, and chew it with my unconscious for a bit. (the same way I read haiku) The poem puts you in a scene. This would probably go well with a story. Rochelle Leya Watts
replies: "I love that you compared it to haiku. My face is probably going all red. Thanks, hon. "
|21 Jun 2006|| Tallulah 'Darkhorse' Cunningham|
Leaving the reader to wonder - what was the favour and what the gift? ^_^ Grrrr! This needs a sister poem to give us a glimse of what comes next. Rochelle Leya Watts
replies: "Sadly this is an old, old poem so not likely to get anything else related to it. You never know though. "