|21 Jan 1999|| Raven|
Oh, jeez, you scared me! I thought for sure you were the Ryan Schmidt that I've known for eight years! But nope, he's not 18
|21 Jan 1999|| Christina E. Brönnestam|
(same as above) Oh my God, how do I write my name today? Now we got it right, sorry.
|21 Jan 1999|| Bronne|
Hi Ryan and welcome to the Library. You know, I've also written about a blacksmith boy, but that is not the reason to why I like your writing so much. I read all the three chapters in one sitting and I am at loss of words ... well, almost. Separate comments will follow to the chapters. My warmest congratulations to this story, I think it is excellent!
|23 Jan 1999|| Ryan|
Thank you so much Christina, everything you've told me has been very much appreciated. I look forward to having your insight on some other writings I do and I can't wait to read some of yours.
|26 Mar 1999|| Jevan Sinnock|
A neighbor in the library and this is the first I've been here. A comment on the third chapter mentions slipping tenses, but it's truly noticeable (still probably something good to work on, though). I did notice spelling (sorry, a pet-peeve of mine) needs a little work at some points, but it doesn't hurt the tale at all. It's a great read and very intriguing.
|14 Feb 2000|| Andrea Nichole Walker|
*Waves and stuffs* ... Yeah... ...hum... ... ...... ... .... well... Yeah. Hey.