heya, I appear to be ur neighbour and know what it's like to get no one commenting in this part of the woods-
Well welcome to the woods (dunno y I'm welcoming u, u got here b4 me)*goes to library*

Rúnar Magnússon replies: "Thanks!"

I love your stories. When is your novel comming out?

hey, i have been trying and trying to put up a comment on one of your stories, it’s not working!

For the Hidden Star: The Mage

Hey, i like this. Here are some nitpicky notes that I think will help your writing:
You could describe your character a little bit more as he makes his way through the building, this would perhaps add more depth to the aspiring mage. How far has he reached in his studies? Is he still a student or a new mage? How did he come across the tome in the first place? Is the building his school? Perhaps a little description of the place since after all there seems to be an ancient mage hidden somewhere in one of its towers, implying that the place is bigger than even a mage’s mind can encompass.

The moral in the end, where a person should be patient and learn how to wield power first before attempting to use it could be emphasized more. You could have Behren remembering old lessons of his masters and his puzzling over them or internally mocking at them. You showed his impatience quite well by his striding through the study room without taking heed of anybody’s advice. I wish you could have described the room in a manner that suggested of any sort of passage of time, after all, if so much time had passed, wouldn’t there be dust covered over everything? And if not, and if there had been so many failed attempts at getting this hidden star wouldn’t there be any sort of clue pointing out to the fact? Such as footsteps across the dust, or something similar?

It all seems to be part of an elaborate test of mage-making, especially for the advanced mage’s, (and a bit cruel if very clever) and perhaps you could have given a flashback of Behren conversing with one of the really gifted mages, his peer perhaps, who wasn’t as foolish as Behren himself and more inclined towards being patient and cautious of the power he was seeking under the Master’s tutelage. This is where Behren’s true motivations and character can come to light.

All the above can serve to increase depth in your character and your fantasy world.
Good luck!