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"Dryad and Naiad" by Sarah-amy haley

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The things they envy of each other are those which they want to escape. ~ Hm, does that make sense?

How can it be

That some call me free

Bound, as I am, to this tree?

I long for a place

My limbs free to race

Caressed by the waves of the sea.

How can it be

That some call me free

Though liquid makes servant of me?

I sink in my doom

These waters of gloom

I long to switch places with thee.

How can it be

They long to be free

The nymphs from the forest and quay?

Though both are alive

For much more they strive

Not dryad nor naiad can see.

Though each one seems free,

They never will be,

For perception will always be key.

←- Death's Folly | Gift Of Tears -→

Date	Name	Comment
30 May 2007	Angela Perry	Loading... I meant free verse, not blank verse smacks hand for confusing the two I like blank verse, I do. Sarah-amy haley replies: ":-B You are forgiven - I didn't even know there was a differents! I should really start learning all these poetry techniques. "
30 May 2007	Angela Perry	Loading... I liked the structure too That was the first thing I noticed when I read the poem. It makes great use of visual elements to show who is speaking, so you don't have to specify in the poem itself. And the meter in this poem is outstanding! Can I tell you how much I love when an author writes something besides blank verse? Blank verse can be nice, but I've always felt it was rather lazy ;-) So I'm happy to see good meter and rhyme pattern! The aab ccb rhyme scheme is a tricky one, and you did a great job.
30 May 2007	Désirée Dippenaar	Loading... Ooh, nice poem! I like the structure, how you show the point of view of the one, then the other, and then a general omnicient point of view in the end... The idea is also great, each wishing to have the life of the other. The bit at the end is good, showing how what the dryad and naiad have missing is perception. Oh yes, and first comment cartwheel-over-to-another-new-story ^.^ (and I can't even do cartwheels, so don't ask me how I managed... hahaha) Sarah-amy haley replies: "Ha, the structure took many attempts with my minimal html knowledge. And I'm sure I wont noitice any 'dodgyness' in the cartwheel with my minimal gymnastics (does cartwheeling count as gymnastics) skills. Thank you for commenting oh kind iguana... "
11 Aug 2007	Trevor D. Worthey	Loading... XD I've always loved stories of Naiads and Dryads, but yours puts a whole new perspective on it... I wonder, have you ever read Piers Anthony's Ogre, Ogre (part of Xanth)? It's a WONDERFUL book, but in it, a naiad is gone from her tree, and the characters have to help her return and protect her from a nearby village of humans. LOL. Not a lot to do with your poem, but it seemed relevant at the time. (^_^) -glomps Love the poem!!! Sarah-amy haley replies: "Thanks, haven't read that book, but I'll cheak it out. Cheers : )"
1 Nov 2007	Zoe Lorinda Cowen	Loading... Nice pom, i like the different perspectives and the two diffrent takes in one poem- cool. Nice use of words. Sarah-amy haley replies: "Tank you Zoe. Nice use of the word pom, lovely. Now as this comment has come as such a shock, and so spontanieous - not at all inorder to get close to the comment prize I will sit and stare, in shock eye's pop in suprise.... "

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About 'Dryad and Naiad':

• Status: OK
• Created by:

Sarah-amy haley
• Copyright: ©Sarah-amy haley. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Dryad, Naiad, Freedom, Perseption
• Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries
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