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"Gift Of Tears" by Sarah-amy haley

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This is my attempt at the Inkwell Artsans project 4 (run by Lindsay Verde), which was focused on liquid. The rhyming is a little random - which I found surprisingly difficult to do - so any comments would be really, REALLY appreciated, thanks. : )
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A diamond, set upon a face.

In grace it falls,

As liquid lace,

To place a waterfall. In chase of tears, that grow,

And sink.

And race.



A pool of fear,

Of love and shame.

Of anger.

Joy.

Grief.

And pain a healing bead,

The seed

Of all who hate, and love, and bleed.

The freed that feed on mind’s emotion,

Humans, by their own devotion.

Devoured by the weeping of the feral liquid queen.



Yet,

From the eyes of others;

Nymphs and imps and elves.

The moistened cheeks,

The weak

And sodden droplets of deceit,

Show only of their treacherous alliance.

Their defeat.



Pity the drowning, deluded, “meek.”



See the sterile waters slowly

Seep from callous eyes. And creep.



Steady.



See the measured heaving,

Gently weaving.

Softly seething.



See the crocodile’s deceiving

With his water…



…Nothing more.



For the humans bear the magic.

Emblem of euphoric strife.

And life

That thrives in joy and pain.

In grief and anger.

Each the same.



A sacred gift. The soul.

Of the rampant liquid queen.

Shed in only places where humanity has been.



The symbol of a laden sphere.

Fusing laughter, hurt and fear.

Purity and liberty

Adjoined within a tear.

←- Dryad and Naiad | Hope -→

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8 Aug 200745 Anonymous
This is really sad, the feel fits the poem!!!!! OK,so the words are long and I only got about half of them but that was enough to know that this is a great poem. I thought the the rhyming was great and it flowed really well and i liked how to joined the lines using similar words- unfortunately I've done the exam and defensively forgot all useful words but i know that has a name- however the odd words in a line to them self never work for me in any poem. Well done, i really enjoyed.

1 Sarah-amy haley replies: "Thanks. I also forget all these poetry names - hope that doesn't effect my GCSE's too much... Cheers for the comment : )"
17 Aug 2007:-) Désirée Dippenaar
I haven't been around for AGES! *hands Swiss chocolate for compensation*

Great poem! The irregular rhythm and unusual rhyme schemes really make it sound almost like sobbing, which suits perfectly!

Good work! ^^ *gives more chocolate*

1 Sarah-amy haley replies: "Whay, you're back. *Munches Swiss Chocolate* - Yumm! Thanks for the comment. This poem was a bit rushed, but it's growing on me - sounds like mould or something : ) Hope you're well. Smile... "
1 Nov 2007:-) Zoe Lorinda Cowen
Nice. I like this poem odd- don't like poems. well done. Zoe shugs holessly- "Tsskkk!"

28 Sarah-amy haley replies: "Hay, you wrote a longer comment when you were anonymous, that's not fair! Ah well, cheers anyway... : ) "
6 Jan 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
So basically you are saying that tears are a human's prerogative? Interesting... I always thought they were annoying, but I like the poem nonetheless. *steals some of Desiree's swiss chocolate and runs away*

22 Sarah-amy haley replies: "  *Wakes up* Hay, Who stole my chocolate?! Well that's just not on, I'm afraid I will be forced to release the hounds, and by houndS I mean hound, and by hound I mean Westie - Still... As for comment, thanks, glad you like it, nonetheless, and yes, you were right! I quite like tears - they taste nice, just half the time I don't like whats caused them (Ofcourse the other half I'm laughing myself silly, in which case I LOVE what caused them!!!) #:~D "
12 Jan 2008:-) Rachel ´Saya´ Lamine
Wow, that was really good with all the different ways you described a tear. Really well written. Didn’t see anything wrong with the rhythm. Good. I’m really bad at reviewing poems so slap me. =/

:-) Sarah-amy haley replies: "I’ll pass on the last point - thanks for the oppertunity, but no, no slaps today... Thanks for the comment, appriciated.

This new reply system is confusing by the way! Ah well ~ cheers for popping by ;- )"
4 May 2009:-) Syn Nykols
nicely wrapped up! all it needs is a bow, a lovely piece, just to think all the world wrapped in a single tear
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About 'Gift Of Tears':
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 • Created by: :-) Sarah-amy haley
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 • Keywords: Tears, Humanity, Poem, Liquid, Queen, Elven, Nymph, Imp, Gift, Weep, Cry
 • Categories: Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Elf / Elves, Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc
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