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J. E. Schroeder

"Black Dawn" by J. E. Schroeder

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A poem written in my usual style, this one is inspired by a character of my brother's creation. He (the character, not my brother ^_~) is known as the Northern Lord or the Master of the North, and his ultimate goal in life is to engulf the world with his spell of darkness and rule it forever. Nice guy, huh?

Revision 5/19/2010 -- adjusted the meter in one tricky spot and added punctuation to help with the flow of the poem.  I still love this one and the character it focuses on, so hopefully you enjoy it as well!


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Upon a throne of gold he rules
in blood and shadow cloaked:
resummoned through the errs of fools,
from Hell's black pits invoked.

Death he carries in his hand
and charitably spreads it 'round;
all must follow his command
or ever be to anguish bound.

Darkness follows in his stead,
and Blackness lurks behind;
with an army of the dead,
his power knows no bind.

His presence daunts the rising sun
and bids the good to die;
cold the Sorcerer"s blood does run
and cruelly gleams his eye.

Only the Northern Master sees
what shadows can reveal:
soon the strong shall bend their knees
and all the world shall kneel.

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11 Aug 2004:-) Alice Muffin Girl Smith
~ Death he carries in his hand
And charitably spreads it 'round < *grins* That's a fun phrasing, if I've ever heard one. ^_^

Very nice job in keeping up the rhyme scheme, as well as the meter... At least, I think that's what they're called. *sheepish grin* I'm so bad with poem comments... Sorry I couldn't be more helpful!

3 J. E. Schroeder replies: "Aw, that was a perfectly good poem comment! Sometimes just a general overview is helpful in itself. After all, a good poem is really just the sum of its parts, right? I'm glad that you liked that line you mentioned. It was my favorite, too 12"
14 Oct 200445 D Joelle Duran
I like this--some very nice, chilling, imagery here. For some reason I tripped up over 'Or be ever to anguish bound' because my brain wants it to be 'Or ever be to anguish bound.' I'm guessing you switched the order for sake of the meter?
Like Alice, the 'charitably spreads it 'round' has a bit of dark humorous flair to it. I have to say I liked: 'Resummoned through the errs of fools/From Hell's black pits invoked' There's a whole tale behind those lines I'm certain!
Good work!

:-) J. E. Schroeder replies: "What about "Or be to anguish ever bound"? I think that is how I intended it, but things always tend to get a little confuddled when I type them up.

Yes, there is a whole dark history behind this piece. As I mentioned above, the character belongs to my brother - and he is not a nice fellow! However, that doesn't keep him from having a rather macabre sense of humor... 12"
4 Dec 2004:-) B Layne
Darkness follows in his stead/And Blackness lurks behind/
With an army of the dead/His power knows no bind--love that stanze. Just a thoroughly unpleasant fellow, isn't he? lol Great job!

12 J. E. Schroeder replies: "Yes, very much so. My brother (to whom this delightfully terrible character belongs) is actually working at the moment on a story in which the Northern Lord has an important role, and I'm trying to convince him to get an Elfwood account and post it. We'll see how that goes! Thanks for commenting 2"
23 Apr 2005:-) Laura C. Barker
Wow well first thankyou for your comments, so many i have to go through and write responses to all of them, and this poem is gorgeous. I adore the idea of death being spread generously ... Good twist of words. I've yet to find time to read through the longer pieces, but if they are like this then i will settle down to read them as soon as i have a moment!

1 J. E. Schroeder replies: "  Thanks Laura! Glad you liked this little piece 2 You know that I enjoyed your artwork, and I still need to get over to your Wyvern page... I've read one or two of your pieces, but didn't have the time to comment... must correct that! Thanks for stopping by 2"
15 Feb 2006:-) Laura de Lange
Wow! I love this poem. Lovely style and rhythm and rhyme. Everything a good poem should be.

13 J. E. Schroeder replies: "Thank you! I'm much flattered 2"
15 May 2006:-) Dan Shevock
Cool poem. He doesn't seem like a very nice guy, this Northern Lord. 2 Fun to read.

12 J. E. Schroeder replies: "Nope, definitely nothing nice about this fellow. As I said in the description, he's a character of my brother's--and probably the most cold-hearted villain I've ever seen! Anyways, thanks for reading and I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it 2"
28 Apr 2007:-) Sarah-amy haley
Awesome, poem. Brilliant from start to finish. Nice one 12

:-) J. E. Schroeder replies: "Thank you 1"
20 Jun 2010:-) Michael a Gra King
Brilliant. I cannot believe I never seen these poems before.

:-) J. E. Schroeder replies: "Glad you stumbled across them now 2 Thanks for the comment!"
25 Jun 2010:-) Ethan Childress
Nice job. I like that clearly the good guys droped the ball on this one. Also great use of meter. Keep it up.

:-) J. E. Schroeder replies: "Thanks Ethan!"
29 Jul 2010:-) Rachel A Mills
A very good poem for a villain. Just curious, did your brother write a story about the Northern Lord, or is he just a character he made up?

:-) J. E. Schroeder replies: "Thanks for reading! My brother does have a portion of the story involving this character written, but I don’t believe he has finished it. But don’t worry, if he does I’ll try to get him to post it here on Elfwood!"
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'Black Dawn':
 • Created by: :-) J. E. Schroeder
 • Copyright: ©J. E. Schroeder. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Darkness, Lord, Northern, Power
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers...
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