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"The Turning" by Karen Stevens

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Not a story, just a short piece imagining how it feels to be turned by a vampire. I imagine it would be quite an erotic experience.
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The Turning


Exquisite, terrifying pleasure as I lose myself in his dark gaze; his fingers brush lightly against my throat, icy. I shiver, fear and desire hopelessly intertwined as he takes hold of my shoulders, his grip as firm and possessive as any lover's, and draws me close with gentle strength.

I think I catch the flicker of gentle amusement on his face, dark eyes tender before I feel the breath of softly murmured words on my neck.

My skin prickles with longing; the heat of lust surges up in my groin and belly as the flesh succumbs willingly to his seduction. His hands trace briefly over my body before he pulls gently at my hair, tilting my head back and baring my neck, his lips on my skin in a moment of impossible, agonised anticipation.

And then his lips draw back, teeth sinking directly into the artery where my pulse beats so rapidly without hesitation. I cry out and slump against him, caught in his embrace as the split second of pain becomes an ecstasy of dark pleasure; lovers now in truth, any purely physical coupling only a pale echo of this. Ecstatic pleasure as he draws the blood from my veins. I know this will kill me if he doesn't stop but I don't care, can't care...

As my heart falters and cold greyness seeps through me, all I feel is a disappointment that it's over so soon. All sensation begins to fade; I know he has an arm locked around my wais, but as my knees buckle I can no longer feel it. Falling...

...Something hot on my face, on my lips. I swallow and taste something as hot as lava, rich and darkly sweet like pure chocolate. I open heavy eyes and see a glint of red. It draws me irresistibly and I lunge forward, my fingers digging savagely into his flesh as I fasten on the wound offered.

Ah – another wave of pleasure engulfs me as I drink from the wound, savouring the sweet, dark taste of his blood.

“Enough; you've taken enough.” His voice is soft but implacable. He catches hold of the back of my neck and draws my mouth away with the same gentle strength he used to pull me close.

I don't try to resist, too caught up in the after-echoes of pleasure and the strange sensations I can feel; licking his blood from my lips like an animal, I can feel a hot, feral energy trembling in my veins, but at the same time I can feel a contented lassitude slipping over my senses.

He draws me up from where we both kneel on the floor, laying the gentle whisper of a kiss on my brow, and again I slump against him. “Rest, little one; the change takes time.” He murmurs softly. I barely hear his words as I slide into darkness. A lone whisper echoes faintly in my mind: what have I done? before it all disappears into warm, dark red oblivion.

←- The Hunter; prologue | A Night In The Life Of -→

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23 Mar 200845 Titan
First!
very interesting writing.
i think you captured the moment in a quite dark and twisted way
as it should be put. reminds me of dracula’s wives... maybe this was their feeling
as they gave their soul to him.. =P


:-) Karen Stevens replies: "Thanks; I’ve always thought being turned would be terrifying and erotic. I would love for someone to write the story of how Dracula’s wives were created!"
15 Jul 2008:-) Tina Winterdragon Olsson
Ooh, very lovely indeed. I like your intense descriptions of sensation, I feel it as if I were the one turning into a vampire while reading it. But then again, maybe that’s just wishful thinking... 12

1 Karen Stevens replies: "Thanks, I’m glad you liked it; I imagine being turned into a vampire would feel incredibly intense...and who wouldn’t want to be!"
29 Sep 2008:-) Tayla Waterworth
Wow, amazing descriptions! I love the way you don’t describe the actual characters and instead focus on the feelings and emotions. Unique, and very effective 2

:-) Karen Stevens replies: "Thanks! I thoguth the feeling and emotions would be more important in such a situation."
13 Oct 2008:-) James G. Jackson
Nice one. Nice touch in that she was clearly enjoying things. I wonder how they met. It suggests something more than a dark figure gliding up the four poster bed while she slept. More likely that they knew each other, and that she knew what he was. It’s all lust, then a hint of regret. Heat of the moment; followed by the "oh no!"

:-) Karen Stevens replies: "Hmm, never thought of the ’before’ actually. Maybe I should give it some consideration. Glad you liked it!"
30 Nov 2008:-) Lynnessa J. Dick
Ooo! Me likes. Simple yet eloquent, definitely captures the imagination and curiosity of the reader! Only one typo, ’wais’ lost it’s ’T’ on the way into the story. Thumbs up!

:-) Karen Stevens replies: "Thanks! Yeah, I’m afriad ’wais’ was one of those ’spotted-it-just-too-late’ typos and if I tried to change it now I’d lose the comments. *sigh* Same thing on Dancer, so I’m afraid the mistakes stay!"
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About 'The Turning':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Karen Stevens
 • Copyright: ©Karen Stevens. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Vampires, Girl, Transformation, Gothic
 • Categories: Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
 • Views: 272


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