| 27 May 2002 | Navah Rosensweig | Loading...Nice description . . . you paint the image of the castle as well as the silence that hangs over it. Nicely done! | |
| 1 Jun 2002 | Heather L. Kidd | Loading...Neat.
I'd like to read a story that goes along with this.
I did something spontaneously for just myself somewhat like this. Only the place that I described seemed externally pleasant, but with something really, truly wrong with it.
Go figure.
But this is much much better than mine. Not that you'll ever see mine. Even if I do get a spot at Wyvern's, that one isn't likely to appear. | |
| 5 Jul 2002 | Andrea Leslie | Loading...I hope you got an A+ on this, it is very beautiful. Feels like I'm right there! I especially like the last line. Yes I did get an A+ on this assignment and in the class, which was no easy feat let me tell you! Thanks for stopping by! I'm glad you liked it!! | |
| 19 Aug 2002 | Annalee Flower Horne | Loading..."tamed by the trained hand of a gardener..." My hat is off to you, Lady. this is GOOD. I really love the imagery. We can really see the castle, feel the wind, hear the silence, and smell the ivy(and yes, Ivy has a smell, just because I know someone will ask). Want more. ::dances along to the next work of genius:: | |
| 14 Dec 2002 | Timothy Walsh | Loading...I loved creative writing class; it seems like you do to (if not, you certainly made the most of your misery). This is very good, and its very original. I love the description with the image of "a thin layer of chalk", that is really imaginative and probably one of the most vivid images I've read in a long time. This truly is excellent and I can find nothing wrong with it. Keep up the excellent work. | |
| 1 Dec 2003 | Amber Silver | Loading...Oh my goodness. I'm speechless.
The line 'Magic sparkled on every available surface like a thin layer of chalk,' was just ... incredible. Wow. | |
| 18 Jan 2004 | Anonymous | Loading...Amazing work. This is the best description I have read. I spent ages on the Internet trying to find a good description of a castle and this is the best one. Wow! You must become an author. This is really good and shows your knowledge of dreaming up imaginary places. Great work. | |
| 21 May 2004 | Anonymous aka J. Elizabeth Denton (JED) | Loading...What are you talking about?!? She IS an author!  (And a wonderfully descript one, too - specially love her vampire story which I would love a third chapter too... HINT HINT.) | |
| 14 May 2006 | Clarion Hess | Loading...Wow. This is an amazing description. You can read it and the reader is interested, involved, drawn in. Not bored like so many other descriptions that last half a page.
This has a very nice touch to it. You have the pen of an artist!! | |
| 28 Mar 2008 | C.s.lewis | Loading...it is a lovely story but making it longer i am a story righter i have written NARNIA it lifted my heart though | |