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Shelby K. Irons

"Away the World (poem)" by Shelby K. Irons

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Hmmm...check out the rhythm patterns in this one. Notice anything? ::wink wink::
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now

sleeping

blow softly

out the candles,

snuff away the world

enchanted gateway's near

with the coming of darkness

as the mind castles crumble down

layer by layer, the dreamer drifts

through gossamer webs of fancy delights



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21 Mar 2002:-) Karl J. Boivin
I like this poetry because it kinda says whre this world of our is going to... The dreamer dreams while around him, in silence, the world is crashing down... I'll come back for more and thanks for commenting my texts.

:-) Shelby K. Irons replies: "Hiya Carl...thanks for el commento! And your welcome....I love your stuff. I vist your gallery often."
25 May 2002:-) Anastasia I-Morn-Gwathren
Wow, that's very interesting! YOu know, there's a branch of poetry where you write words in the form of what you're writing about. I saw one poet wrote a poem about a tie and it looked like a tie! It's hard to describe, but he put the words so it looked like a tie! Anyway, great job on this one!
27 May 2002:-) Navah Rosensweig
Ooh. Tres cool, m'lass. I like the poem, and I like the structure. Good job on all accounts.
5 Jul 2002:-) Andrea Leslie
I really like how this starts with one word and slowly spreads out, I can just imagine this poem expanding into dreams. Very creative!
19 Aug 2002:-) Annalee Flower Horne
:21mirks like a proud kinder-gardener:: I get it! I Get it! there's one more beat per line! am I right? am I? Am I?

Sorry- that insanity aside, this is a really pretty piece. Gossamer is one of the coolest words in this language, and people that actually use it correctly make it twice as cool.
:14outs:: I'm not the first comment! well, fine. ::does the most recent comment dance::

:-) Shelby K. Irons replies: "*Ding* You got it right Annalee...and what do you win? :21prinkles her with fairy dust as she dances:: Make a wish. "
27 Aug 200245 Zachary D. McCauley
*to Katie Sweet's comment* Periods often help in poetry to show articulation in speech of the poem. If Shelby wanted to pause she could place a comma or a semi-colon, and if she wanted to end the phrasing with a certain tone, for effect, she could use a period. (That stuff's for you to consider, Shelby ^.^) No bitterness intended, Katie! ^_^
6 Sep 2002:-) Navah Rosensweig
Heya, Shelby! I stumbled across this poem again via the random button, and I still really like it, and thought I'd tell you so again! Oh - and I've updated!
14 Dec 2002:-) Timothy Walsh
This is interesting, I've seen work like this before, but its usually pretty trite; this is not. You seem to have excellent control of the English language and all of its nuances (I agree with the commenter above, gossamer is one of the best words ever). You certainly are a wonderful writer and poet. Keep up the good work.
1 Dec 2003:-) Amber Silver
This is gorgeous. I love the form and I love the last line, /through gossamer webs of fancy delights/. Gossamer. Gossamer. Gossamer. Must... commit gossamer to ... memory. That's a beautiful word. Very effective!
18 Dec 200445 Kim (Deb Smiths daughter)
I really liked your poem. I was surprised at how short it was but Im still a virgin Elfwood explorer. But the imagery was beautiful. It just seemed so peaceful.
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About 'Away the World (poem)':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Shelby K. Irons
 • Copyright: ©Shelby K. Irons. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: World, Sleeping, Candles, Enchanted, Darkness, Castles, Dreamer, Gossamer webs
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
 • Views: 233


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