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Shelby K. Irons

"I do (poem)" by Shelby K. Irons

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I think about you
But I don't want to.
Every fibre of my being
Screams
That I don't need you.


I don't need to hear your voice on the line.
I don't need to feel your hand touching mine.
I don't need to see the way you love me.
I don't want to need you the way that I do.

But I do.


You've crept up on me slowly
When I was looking the other way
With all the perfect things you always say
And a smile in your eyes.


You've been here all along,
Waiting patiently for me to decide
By giving me my freedom
And all the room in the world to hide.


And I think about you
But I don't want to.
Every fibre of my being
Screams
That I don't need you.


I don't need to hear your voice on the line.
I don't need to feel your hand touching mine.
I don't need to see the way you love me.
I don't want to need you the way that I do.

But I do.



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15 Aug 2001:-) Nathaniel Stephen Gunter
*Gets a warm fuzzies in stomach* SOMEONE CALL THE PARAMEDICS! Nate's eating fuzzies!!!! ::lol::
6 Oct 2001:-) Crissy Gottberg
I called, they said it should be alright so long as he doesnt eat too many 2
I like this poem, its how i remember being... knowing i was but fighting against it... very true to life.
But i think "fibre" is spelt "fiber" i could be wrong though.
13 Nov 200145 Jonathan W. Holmes
I understand what you mean with this one...L'amour c'est le genre au le poetry eau le france...Romantique est tres bien!
8 Feb 200245 R.K. Vegh ~~ Trulance
An interloper caught in the spotlight... I hadn't intended to comment, only read your poems. This one is so piercing. It awakens some feelings.

:-) Shelby K. Irons replies: "Oh dear, I'm awakening things...I hope they are good feelings...thanks for commenting. I had hoped you would come and visit me sometime. :21miles:: "
21 Mar 2002:-) Karl J. Boivin
Romance is a sweet thing, and I gotta admit mixing darkness with it, I love that! What I'm stating here is a suggestion to make it more perfect! Mix some shadows, lurking evil emotions throughout your poetry when you say you don't need this or that, when you say "You've crept on me slowly....", this part would be a stun with something like, I don't know:"The shimmers I felt when your shadow struck my eyes..." "I hated your light that twisted my soul, until my dark heart was no more, born anew that is, you shed it's skin, now it's a place where you hide, your love from within."
I'm not sure I made myself be understood here but really, a mix of darkness and romance is a killer to me! Try it and notice me, I'll come and read it.
5 Jul 2002:-) Andrea Leslie
I love this poem, its so much like a song. This poem really touches your heart, and the repitition makes it stay in your mind. Very beautiful.
12 Jul 200245 Kilian
hmm, well everything I was going to say is already said. =)
it makes me remember a feeling I have had too many times,(and will have many more)a feeling I love, but kind of hate too. long time since I read such a good poem!!!!
look forward to read the other poems you have written.

=)
1 Dec 2003:-) Melanie Köhler 'Mistress of Chaos'
*nods* I know what you mean...

I really like the flow of the poem in general, but I think that there is no sense of an ending. Poems don't always need endings, so leaving it as is, is fine, things that aren't resolved at the end just always annoy me.
1 Dec 2003:-) Amber Silver
Very nice! For some reason when I read this, a whole story formed in my mind. The speaker was a woman who was seduced by a vampire. He is a gallant, wise man who offered her immortal life. She fears becoming undead, but at the same time she knows that her soul is his. Wow. Powerful poem!
17 Jul 200945 Anon.
I LIKE THIS ONE BECAUSE SOME GIRLZ FEEL THE WAY THIS POEM IS TELLING US BUT THEN WE WANT THIS MEN BACK I LOVE THIS POEM IT MAED ME THINK OF ALOT OF THINGS AND LIKE ITS NOT JUST A POEM ITS LIKE WHATS GOING ON IN MY LIFE NOW I LOVE IT SO MUCH THAT I WANT TO PUT IT ON MY MYSPACE AND ITS LIKE I DO BUT THEN I DONT BECAUSE WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO BEXT
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About 'I do (poem)':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Shelby K. Irons
 • Copyright: ©Shelby K. Irons. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Love, Poem, Need, Want, Think, Feel, Dream, Sleep, Patient
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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