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Dan Shevock

"Arathyn" by Dan Shevock

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A poem, based on a character in 'The Betrayal of Amaranthe' by Mercedes Boggs (character referral used with permission) http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/libr/c/h/chlowie/chlowie.html
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Arathyn

by Dan Shevock

 

honored son of the kingdom

            poor waif, nothing is your own

            not even your promised

 

upon the cleanest canvass

            even the rejected

            can find imperfections

 

what is in your psyche

            what broken muse

            and tainted demon

 

the stoutest oak

            breaks to the wind

            as the willow bends

 

the hurricane is here

            just what can you take

            how stout can you stand

 

legions of orcs

            and few of your kith

            will stand next to you

 

selfless warrior

            yourself you lose

            giving fool

 

be like your comrade

            and take, and have

            while you still can

 

the ladies during war

            want what is near

            not what is sturdy

 

so my daft Arathyn

            why do you cry

            a tearless sigh

 

why be so strong

            that no one can enter

            your unbreaking heart

←- Above | Baron of Sanwick: The Spirit at Fergus Castle -→

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3 Nov 2005:-) Joslyn Rubin
woah. this is great. i cant pick out what i like about it.

i also cannot believe no one commented on this. *gazes menacingly into the crowd which is very hard since she is not normally a mean person*

well.. i guess that means i get the first comment dance.. but.. im feeling drained soo my dragon will dance. muahahaha..

*watches as Gage the Dragon does the first comment dance*

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks. 2 The character it's based on really inspired me. If you've not yet read the story this is based on, I suggest you do. (I've actually gotten some future storyline from the author, it rocks)"
4 Nov 2005:-) Lalie R. Roque
This is awesome, and I have to say that you do something that I can rarely accomplish, which is keeping a rhythm & flow to the poem.

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks."
6 Nov 2005:-) Naomi *OmI* Repper
Not only is this a great read, i actually went back and read it again. Now, i dont usually do that but theres something about the words in this piece that speak an emotion. It feels personalised to one main subject but at the same time i feel it has range of a bigger source of like a nation and thats clever ^_^. Well done!

Luv omi-chan
xxxxxx

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks. I guess that's what an artist hopes for, that their piece can be looked over multiple times, and still be good. BTW, your art is great, very well done. Particularly that one with the mini-wizard and the autumn leaves. "
11 Nov 2005:-) Sophia Tula Rose Dique
Brilliant. I love the way you changed the margin thingies...
And thanks for commenting on my thing by the way.

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "you're welcome, it was a joy, and thanks. 2"
4 Dec 2005:-) Andrijana Ignjatovic
Nice! The hard thing with poems is that you have to express your meaning or purpose with the poem in just so few words, a feat I think you pulled off very good.

Poor thing, a closed heart does not mean one is strong.
Very good.

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks for the comment.. (poor thing) I know, I felt so bad for him when I read Mercedes' story on elfwood. (esp. since it didn't seem like most writers connected to him, but with Falin, also a cool character, sort of) His flaw is being a Paladin to the extreme. Flawed characters are much more interresting. (like Launcelot's libido)"
2 Feb 2006:-) Alinta Brown
And after all that he has an 'unbreaking heart'. Wonderous

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Yeah, Mercedes really created a great character in Arathyn."
10 May 2006:-) Alexandru Moisi
Hmm...This poem left me with the feeling that I am stupid. I like it but have no idea why. Somehow it makes me think of heroes that are "doomed" to be heroic just because of their birth...nice.

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks for the nice comments. This poem ties in with the story by Mercedes Boggs. I have a different take on the character Arathyn than other people on her comment board, and thought it would make an interesting poem. If you like this, you should read her story. 2"
2 May 2007:-) Sarah-amy haley
I think I might read the story this is from, you've put across the character well, I really feel for him, Awww.

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "yay, someone should care for Arathyn. Sometimes I think I'm the only one."
3 May 2007:-) Désirée Dippenaar
Hoo, I like this poem~ You brought in the character really well; I'll have to read the story now! ^^ I also like how you formatted the poem, with the indents in every stanza. A very interesting poem! ^^

:-) Dan Shevock replies: "Thanks. Arathyn's a very interesting character, created by a very talented writer."
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About 'Arathyn':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Dan Shevock
 • Copyright: ©Dan Shevock. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Arathyn, Honor, Lancelot, Unbroken, Stout, Strong, Knight
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Fights, Duels, Battles, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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