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"Songs of the Downtrodden 2 (poem)" by Kate "Silverfish" Jennings

SF&F Picture 2 out of 9 by Kate "Silverfish" Jennings

This is a lament for one who has fallen under the tyrant's hand. It is from a fantasy story in which the main characters belong to a downtrodden but quietly rebellious people. The lilies refer to the Lily Crown of the oppressor, the gold crowns are the money minted by the same, the linen is both a sign of the 'nobles' and an important trade item, and the mouth is covered because the people are forbidden to speak their own language. (I think the description is now longer than the poem!).

SONGS OF THE DOWNTRODDEN 2: Lament

So soft he lies
Lily-wreathe white on his white brow dies.
Gold crowns
Weigh the lids of his blue eyes down.
Linen from the noble south
Covers his mouth.
Hands fold on the heart that once beat fast,
Heart's pain and trouble past.
Land that he may not own
Owns him at last.

←- Songs of the Downtrodden 1 (poem) | Songs of the Downtrodden 3 (poem) -→

Date	Name	Comment
21 Mar 2003	Charles Mills Trowbridge	Loading... I dident get the meator of this song down after the first couple of readings, but then again, I am less than tallented at music. The one thing that gnaws at me a little is how direct the song is. Seems like a few days in the pillowy if someone gets caught singing a tune like that. Although it's hard with fantasy to have it both make sense to the reader and be somewhat based on a historical thing, it might be worth trying to artistically discuise some of the words here and there to make a double entandre. Kate "Silverfish" Jennings replies: "I don't think they'd necessarily be caught. It is fairly cryptic and to be sung at a funeral, where all the references would be real as well as metaphorical (wrapped in cloth, coins on eyes, flowers on grave)."
23 Sep 2003	Sarah	Loading... very good Kate "Silverfish" Jennings replies: "Thank you."
22 Sep 2004	Michiel 'Blood Raven' van Lierop	Loading... I liked the first one better I think, but this one's good too, though maybe a bit on the short side. I had to read it twice before I could match a rythm with it.
2 Apr 2008	Jacob Bowdin	Loading... Hmmm, I think I enjoyed this better than the first, it had some good description in it, I liked, "Heart’s pain and trouble past." A neat line.

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About 'Songs of the Downtrodden 2 (poem)':

• Status: OK
• Created by:

Kate "Silverfish" Jennings
• Copyright: ©Kate "Silverfish" Jennings. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Death, Sad, Tyrant, Oppressor, Lament
• Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins, Celtic
• Views: 710

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