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"Secrets" by Simi Landau Muffin Queen

SF&F Picture 2 out of 25 by Simi Landau *Muffin Queen*

The darkness within is often as bad as the darkness without...

Pretending…

There is a place in me

No one dares see

For the darkness is so great

That it blinds

Killing…

Imagining a person who is not gone

Winning wars I have not won

Night and day separating two people

Sharing one twisted soul

Running…

Staying where I am

Celebrated and alive

The darkness cannot touch me here

But there is never enough light

Hiding…

Out of breath in the darkness

Of the full moon

With nowhere left to go

Faster than the darkness can run

Dying…

Still alive so long as there is light

Though it pains me to be

Everyone sees me, sees not the darkness

Only the light I do not have

Living…

In my death I see the darkness I have become

Celebrated more now than when I had the light

The darkness claims me but no—I am still here

But no, says the darkness, I am still here…

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Date	Name	Comment
9 Nov 2005	Patricia M. D´Angelo	Loading... I don't usually read many poems. I have trouble finding their true meanings. I liked this one, as it seemed the poem for the tortured soul. It's easy to down play our own achievements, because it easy to feel unworthy of accolades. I think all of us have a side we keep hidden, that we're sure if people saw, they would surely shun us. Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "You have this poem down perfectly. H'ray! I do like this poem because I don't dance around all sorts of hidden meanings with it. It's nice to be blunt, every once and a while. Thanks for the comments, I really appreciate them!"
28 Nov 2005	Evren W.	Loading... Wow, this is really good. I really enjoyed the pretending part. That was like so awesome! Everything together as a whole is great! =) Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Yay, thanks much for the comment! I am so glad you liked it!"
2 Dec 2005	Dan Shevock	Loading... Very nice poem. I think because most of us feel many of these feelings at some point in our lives, and therefore can connect with it, making it very emotive. well done. Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Thank you very much, Dan!"
17 Dec 2005	Laura de Lange	Loading... I wish I could write poetry like that. My own poems are confusing to say the least! Anyway, stunning emotions! Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Thank you! I'm glad you like it. This is one of my oldest poems evar...so it's funny, to me, that people still like it! Thanks for the comment!"
13 Apr 2006	Emma Kathryn McDonald	Loading... "But no, says the darkness, I am still here…" Absolutly fantastic final line...genious! I really liked this...interest form too...not something I would have thought of...but maybe that's because I'm a dimwit...meh shrugs shoulders...well done anyway! Lotsaluv, Em Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "As my poems get older (and this one is pretty old) I tend to stop liking them, but despite its age I am still quite fond of that line. Not a dimwit! Never a dimwit. Every writer is different, and every writer gets to do different things. I happened to get this one, is all. huganamuffin!"
19 Jun 2006	Aridine Fiegenbaum	Loading... hey...im back lol i still love this poem....did you ever think of publishing it somewhere??? lol =D ummm i'm getting an elfwood accound and i wanted to know if i could put a link to this on my page...saying that its an awesome poem? lol Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Awww, thanks! It would be totally cool if you put up a link. I guess I should think about sending this into a horror or fantasy magazine...hm...I keep telling myself I'm going to, but then life happens and I never have time. Agh. headdesk Thanks for stopping by again, and let me know when your account is up!"
23 Jun 2006	Lenny	Loading... I JUST LOVE YOUR POETRY!!!!!!!!!!! this poem somehow... puts a lot of emotion into you. like, i can see this person. once again... such imagery. I'M AT A LOSS OF WORDS!!! Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: " Cool, I'm glad you like it! This is still one of my favorites, too. Thanks so much for the comment!"
18 Jan 2007	Janna Prosvirina	Loading... fantastic! every word is a treasure! Simply great! Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Thank you! This is a longtime favorite of mine."
27 Apr 2008	Jessica J Zimdars	Loading... WOW, that was wonderful! very much filled with emotion, very feeling, very clear. wonderful! Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Thanks so much! Oh dang, this is one of my oldest poems up. I’m glad it still gets good responses!"
30 Apr 2008	Michael pixie john	Loading... good one i can see aspects of myself in there i like the ending very thought provoking and lovely flow of words and sentiments Simi Landau Muffin Queen replies: "Glad you enjoyed it, dude! The ending was always my favorite part, too."
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