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"Among Chaos" by Laura Skylie Engler

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Ah!  To be among chaos!
There has always been that moment, late at night, when the world is so dark and full of havoc that it almost seems calm…That moment is….
 Like a butterfly gracefully gliding during a sandstorm
 Like the last breath of a million mountains before they crumble to the forest
  floor into simple pebbles
 Like the hush of a crowd at a funeral
 Like that strange silence that falls over a person that was just laughing seconds
  ago and is now facing sudden tragedy
 Like a flame being ignited on the pale gray sea
 Like bones coming to rest and minds settling in ease
 A wide-eyed child in a ragged dress, stumbling through a battlefield
 Like a lost kitten on a busy street
 The plateau before pure ecstasy
 The lull before absolute sorrow
 Like a person shrouded in a while dress walking across a dark room
 Like a lost train of thought
 Like the thoughts you receive right before you slip into sleep, the ones forgotten
  with the arrival of dreams
 Like finding deep, personal solitude when you’re shopping though a busy grocery
  store for your cereal
 It is a clearing surrounded by a tornado of gently blowing blossoms and pollen
  that swirls around you and tickles your senses
 Like that feeling when time suddenly slows for a second (but that second is more
  like an hour until the moment is over)
 Like when your head clears like the blank page of an unfinished novel
 A supernova, such a violent explosion and a beautiful one, yet no one to see it
 Like that star in the supernova, how it must feel after the grandeur of that
  spectacle
 And how it must feel after it has collapsed into a black hole, vacant, dark,
and empty
 Like fairy dust

 
 
 
 

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5 Nov 2002:-) Sarah Hudson
Wow, your writing is very inspiring. This one also makes me want to illustrate it... 2 This imagery is very effective and I really like your writing style. Your fellow writers can give you a better idea about the technical stuff obviously (since I think it's perfect just the way it is!) but I really like it! You certaintly have slain my artist's block.
25 Nov 2002:-) Matthew Hart Akers
Hmmmm... prosaic poetry... it's wonderful. I've been trying for years to write in this style, because you can speak almost directly to the subconscious feelings with it. You did a wonderful juob at doing just that, too.
25 Nov 200245 Lindy 'Shanra' Kuepers
I'd agree with Jennifer on one thing, but disagree at the second part of her comment. You do have talent, clear as day, but in no way do I consider this too long. Prosaic poetry is quite hard to do, but you pulled this off wonderfully. The images you paint are very vivid and not to mention beautiful. The title is very appropriate seeing the way you wrote it. Basically I mean what Joey said, but it's more. It's also that you use lines of very few syllables in contrast to the really long sentences that are more common in this particular piece.
It takes some getting used to the jumping from very-long to very short, but it fits the poem nicely. I think that the sentence 'like fairy dust' is a very good ending to this. It leaves you imagining more scenes in the same pattern as above. And that is a gift ^_^
10 Dec 200245 Anonymous
It was a nice travel, picture after picture, among the contrasts and chaos of Universe. Remember Scrooge when taken to see several scenes? I had the same type of feeling of being put in front of different situations to learn of them 2 Achieving that is not easy. I liked.
3 Mar 200345 Lindsey Butler
Reading this felt like walking through a town and peeking into windows. Every line was a new spectacle and an intriguing moment to ponder over, I escpecially enjoyed the line about buying cereal 2

:-) Laura Skylie Engler replies: "everyone loves cereal. ^_^"
4 Mar 2003:-) Carla K. Anderson
All right, sufficiently chastened, I read this one first... glad I did. I like especially how you blended the everyday with the fantasy element... must fondue!
--Mirime
10 Mar 200345 Pelv13
Loved the imagery... The thing with imagery is that it needs some atachment to something more concrete... Definately worth the read though
21 Mar 200345 Samael
Ah... how can I describe it? I love this! Brilliant imagry. I could not improve on this.
31 Aug 200345 John Teall
Cerial is ok for desert
only
only the strainge survive

=^^=
.../\...
17 Oct 200345 John Teall
I can't believe i was the last person to comment on this
well ok i guess i have to
i like that feeling of empowerment you get in a space that
is open to deffinician or redeffinician
that is how i tend to see chaos rather then havoc

=^^=
.../\...
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About 'Among Chaos':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Laura Skylie Engler
 • Copyright: ©Laura Skylie Engler. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Poem, Chaos, Pictures, Mind
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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