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Jayne Leonard

"Dragon´s Heart" by Jayne Leonard

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I wrote this poem 4 years ago when I started trying my hand at creating literature. Also, I was completely obsessed with dragons. This is a poem about what young minds can believe, and what wiser minds actually know.
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The beat is strong,

The belief is true,

The life is long,

It fights only me and you.

It hides in darkness,

Or lives in light,

Above the fields in glorious flight.

Their heavenly wings do not make a sound,

Their ferocious roar shakes the ground.

A breath of steam,

A heart of flame,

Only a fool would deny my claim.

An ancient race,

Bless us with their grace.

Above the clouds,

Wisdom calls,

With the strength of the Gods,

They guard us all.

Now they are all but one,

A legend they have become.

Now as you slip into a slumbering sleep,

Listen to the thundering beat…

Of the DRAGON’S HEART.
←- The Tales Of Fagelio - Chapter One - Part Four | Me and Myself -→

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1 Aug 200745 Nikola Ivosevic
Very good. I like it. The words simply slide, and it's clear, what reader can see from the rhymes, that the poem was written with meaning. Nice...

1 Jayne Leonard replies: "Oh thank you very much!! I wrote this a long time ago when i was going through a bit of a hard time and i needed to believe in something. Looking back at it now i thought it was a little childish but i'm glad you liked it!"
8 Aug 2007:-) Jeff D. Brown
good, somewho meaningful, though I don't quite understand how, close your eyes to the beat of a dragon's heart?? I need an explanation

18 Jayne Leonard replies: "It's all about believing in what you want to believe. The need to believe in something 'higher' or 'better' than yourself to give you hope and strength when you need it most. Also, the need to re-tell stories to keep them alive before their forgotten forever.It's slightly based on two combinations of legends. Dragons and "I don't believe in faries" - and a fairy dies *clap hands* (I DO BELIEVE IN FARIES!!)The first stanza is about a time where people believed in dragons so they thrived as a spieces, but like everything - people loose faith and the number of dragons start to dwindle.The second stanza is telling you no matter (in the beginning) whether you believe or not they are there - even if you can't see them. The same in the third stanza - some people can hear them, some can't.Stanza six is basically even though people stopped believing in them they still guard us. Giving protection.Stanza seven is showing that because people stopped believing in them only one remained. In someone's (my) heart and mind and the last part is a plea to make people just listen to the magic and carry on the story.Hope this clears a few things up for you! 1 "
17 Aug 2007:-) David Christopher Meredith
It is very clear in its simplicity and yet evocative. The only thing I might mention is that you shift back and forth betewwn refering to the "dragon" as "I" and "They" respectively. I think tis shifting weakens the impact somewhat. I think it would be more impactful to stick with one pronoun or the other.

2 Jayne Leonard replies: "Hello again! Thanks for the advice! I'll definately have a re-think then. Hmmmm... Anyway, i'll pop round to your library and and comment some more! Speak to you soon!"
17 Aug 2007:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
I like it ^_^ I found it easy to understand and it flows nicely.

1 Jayne Leonard replies: "Thank you! I'm glad you like it. I'll stop by your library soon!"
7 Sep 2007:-) Katie J. Anderson
hey i like this =) which is unususal for me, i rarely find anything poetic that i much like. It's simplicity doesn't make it childish, just clear, and sounds heartfelt =)

1 Jayne Leonard replies: "Thanks for your kind words! I'm glad you've found a poem that you like! I suppose the reason i thought it was childish for is because this is one of the first things i ever composed and i have never been very good at poetry. I wrote it years ago. (roughly seven years i think!) So as you can guess it's very close to my heart. But, most of all i'm glad that people like it. I'm going to swing by asap and do some commenting of my own!"
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About 'Dragon's Heart':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Jayne Leonard
 • Copyright: ©Jayne Leonard. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Dragon, Heart, Death, Respect
 • Categories: Dragons, Drakes, Wyverns, etc
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