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David Michael

"Lord of the Desert Storm" by David Michael

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This is 1) a late Christmas/early birthday present for a dear friend, and 2) a submission for the Herscher Project 30.5.

“Lawrence, only two kinds of creatures get fun in the desert: Bedouins and gods, and you’re neither. Take it from me; for ordinary men, it’s a burning, fiery furnace.”
~ Mr. Dryden, Lawrence of Arabia (1962)

“The best of them won’t come for money; they’ll come for me.”
~ T. E. Lawrence, on why the Bedouin will follow him into battle

EDIT: I'm honored, and somewhat ecstatic, to have received my first mod's choice! Thanks to all of you who read my stuff here and take the time to comment.

EDIT 5/24/2009:  The tale has been continued!


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            Dry and hard was the desert wind as it slid through the peregrine falcon’s banded gray feathers, carrying with it the smells of dust and distant markets.  Sunlight glinted from the bird’s black eyes as it chased its undulating shadow north over shifting dunes and valleys, searching through the oppressive wind for the one thing which it knew would not fully be engulfed by the gradually rising sands.  A warm updraft lifted it higher, and it beat its wings to outpace the wind itself and shoot up towards the sun, so that from such a height it might cast its piercing gaze even unto the shimmering horizon.  Brownish red plateaus stretched in from the west like giant ships moored at the far mountains’ feet.  The falcon dove beneath some marshaling clouds and soared over a wide but towering canyon, which deep in its recesses harbored Setali Mora, the Climbing City of Lord Armistad, the highest reaches of which were carved into the rock walls and overlooked the canyon and its river.

            Silently, like an anxious cloud, a horde of robed riders galloped down from the city through the great ravine.  They did not stop when they left it, but moved purposefully into the increasingly angry whipping sands and disappeared as if no longer meant for living eyes.  The falcon saw this and flew with greater speed over the open desert.

            The roar of the growing sandstorm was left behind, and a wall of silence, the only cool element in this place, rose off the burnt, powdered ground.  With a mournful look in its glinting eyes, the falcon passed over the last green oasis.  A long ridge of snaking dunes stretched out below, marking the northern border of Aymara, Lord Armistad’s domain.  Beyond, the desert stretched unbroken for leagues on end with no rock or shelter.  It was impassable to all but the lord of the desert winds, and perhaps those with unusually strong magic.

            As if responding to a call resounding deep within its bones, the falcon dove towards the border dunes and alighted smoothly on a black-gloved hand outstretched in the air.

            “Ah, what is this?  A friend so far from home and nest!”  Armistad brought the bird close and smiled as it nudged its beak into his dark goatee, disrupting the finely greased curl.  “Thank you.  I must start this alone, but it is nice to see a friend first.  And perhaps it shall not be long before my riders come.”

            He raised a jeweled saber in his right hand and watched its keen blade splice the yellow sunbeams into ribbons that fell down the hill, unraveling at its foot.  Far off behind him, and falling from the clouds from the direction of Setali Mora, he thought he heard the strains of a wavering love song strummed on a five-stringed oud…it was the one Ibrahim the luthier had played at his wedding feast.  Humming to himself, and with a slow, dance-like movement that used his whole body, he extended the saber back, up, and then down into its ivory-enameled sheath.

            The wind, which had died down, suddenly leapt up again, catching both the cloth at the back of his neck and the long folds of his black robe and jerking them out in front.  A loose burgundy tunic was held down by a tan leather vest with wide shoulders that also harbored numerous knives of various lengths and shapes.  The falcon cried piercingly as its feathers were ruffled out of place.

            “Ah, sh sh!” cooed Armistad, sheltering the bird with his body.  “‘Tis time for you to take wing before the battle.  The arrows of Sheik Shethar will cut anything out of the sky, and the sandstorm surely will not give way to even a king such as you.  You must start now if you are to escape.”  He looked behind him, where far in the distance an enormous brown wall of dust and sand covered the horizon, boiling madly as it sped over leagues of rocky desert, flattening and tearing all in its path.  It sounded now as a lion’s purr, but growing steadily in volume and violence.

            He felt a light nudge by his heart and looked down into the falcon’s glinting eyes.  Something burned in them that he had never seen before, and in that moment, the bird looked right into his soul.  It beat its wings quickly, smoothly, and pushed away from Armistad’s arm to hover before him in a manner more like a dragonfly than a bird of prey.  A golden shimmering light fell from the gray wings, forming into an image shifting in the wind but gradually solidifying.  Armistad laughed and stroked his beard in astonishment.  It was a head…and a face…a beautiful woman’s face.

            “Kelita!” he cried happily, recognizing his wife, and thrust his arms into the fast-beating winds.  The shimmering image, washed in the burnt gold of the desert air, laughed with him, love in her eyes.  Hands of the same magic light appeared and reached out to caress his face, and unconsciously his own hand reached up to hover at her immaterial, delicate wrist.  She leaned forward and kissed him, and then the wind blew the elegant, smiling vision away from his grasp, back to Setali Mora.  Cheeks burning as he laughed, he watched the falcon turn and, as it winged gracefully higher, vanish into the wind.

            “Ah, what skill she has!  In all the kingdoms of the world, there is no woman as skillful as my wife.  Thank you, my desert rose, you have brightened my eyes and quickened my blood at the time I need it most.”

            As his eyes fell upon the barren northern horizon, his brow furrowed and his jaw hardened.  He saw a low dust cloud rising up – rising, he knew, from thousands of tramping booted feet.  A thin black line soon became apparent, the vanguard of Sheik Shethar’s army.  Armistad watched it with interest, the roar of the sandstorm growing behind him.  “So, they have survived the leagues of dead lands!  The ambition to conquer is a strong one indeed, I know, but he has more in him than I gave him credit for.  Magnificent.  Of course, I did call him a flea on the rump of a diseased goat in front of his mother, so perhaps that has extended his stamina.  But still he is a fool.”

            Sheets of sand glided by all around him, tearing into the rocks on the dune and shifting all the sands in a violent fury.  A giant, buzzing shadow fell over Lord Armistad as the sandstorm blocked out the sun, and he rolled his head back and sighed in satisfaction.  In all the cacophonous madness, not one grain of sand touched his body.

            He stepped forward and still was untouched by anything but the wind, which pushed him forward in eager waves, rushing between his legs as if to lift him up.  His laugh was drowned in the shrieking roar of the blistering storm, which was now only three bowshots away, and eating up the desert like pride of starved lions.  Once more his saber was drawn from its sheath, and he held it aloft as he strode down the sand dune bordering his realm.  He could no longer see Shethar’s army on the horizon, for the sands were swirling about him to thick and furious.  They were there, all the same, coming closer, exhausted from their long march but still hoping for the taste of blood and the rumored wonders of his city.

            Lord Armistad ran over the sands, his wrapped boots barely touching them, his black robe straining around his sides to pull him forward.  With a shout of triumph that came either from the man or the wind itself, or both, the red boiling sandstorm engulfed the desert lord, rolling onward towards the horizon.  Still the sands did not touch him, but split and curved around his body, lifting his legs into greater strides and clearing the way under his feet.  All about him he heard the pounding hooves of stallions, and the flitting shapes of their silent, robed riders could be glimpsed between the sands.  The storm seemed to heave and puff like him as he ran, and from his lungs poured a deep song, an old song…one of the oldest of Setali Mora, written by one of their ancient bards, and the one he had sung for Kelita his wife on their wedding day.  Far back in the direction of his city, the strains of the song played on Ibrahim’s oud still reached though the winds’ mighty roaring, and above it all he heard the hunting call of the peregrine falcon.

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21 Jun 2008:-) Christy Miller
What beautiful writing!!! You truly have a gift with words, the way each scentence flows is phenominal. This is my absolute vavorite: "He raised a jeweled saber in his right hand and watched its keen blade splice the yellow sunbeams into ribbons that fell down the hill, unraveling at its foot. " Oh, the visions this creates. I agree with the above comments; the details are a little faint, but that makes the story all the more intreaguing.

:-) David Michael replies: "Thank you! Your comment is much appreciated. I probably will have to doctor either that line or what’s around it, in order to make it less startlingly surreal/obscure/confusing, but it’s an image I love. I could see someone paint it in a very stylized way. Like something to go with an ancient myth."
22 Jul 2008:-) William Scott Lowe
Great buildup. I like how the magic is so subtle and powerful at once.

Is the story fully developed (beginning middle end) or was this just an inspired scene? Leaves questions that want answers, I think you should continue writing it.

:-) David Michael replies: "It’s just an inspired scene so far, although I certainly have more to write about Armistad and Kelita. Thanks for dropping by, and I’ll definitely consider writing what happens next!"
30 Jul 2008:-) Frank Adrian Istad
WOW... That is some of the best I’ve ever read!!! It is an honor to be corrected by a writer of you caliber!!

:-) David Michael replies: "Why thank you! I’m pleased you like it. The only way I know of to increase one’s writing skills is to read and write a lot. Even reading non-fantasy stuff will help you write fantasy, if it’s good literature at all."
8 Aug 2008:-) Chris King
I enjoyed this story very much, and it left me wanting more. I particularly liked the way you described the desert environment--I felt like I was there. I hope you continue with Armistad!

:-) David Michael replies: "Thank you! I will certainly write more with Armistad at some point, though I’ve several overdue projects on other characters to finish first."
19 Aug 2008:-) Caitlin Rose Dunks
There is a great magical quality in the sandstorm at his back... VERY cool. My only change would be to vary your sentence length a little... I do exactly the same thing, pile one long sentence filled with passionate description on another, so I can’t really complain, but I did have to re-read a few things because I got lost. I love Armistad, his falcon and the light-falling-from-his-wings bit. Very original, which is a difficult thing to do in fantasy! ; )

:-) David Michael replies: "Yes, I’ve had that problem a lot in my writing, though I seem to complain about it more than most of my readers. It’s definitely present here. Need to pay more attention to the rhythm of the story and all. Thanks for the comment, ’tis much appreciated! Armistad’s a neat guy, neater when I write more. Another character you might like is the Dragonking in "Sea Far and Deep." Most people seem to like him."
3 Sep 2008:-) Grayson Haak Audette
wow, thanx for recommending me to this story, i love te desert, so if you know any full length fiction books about something desert related please tell me.

:-) David Michael replies: "You’re very welcome. Well, the Dune series is famous, and at least the first one takes place on a desert planet, but I’ve never read them myself. Robin McKinley’s The Blue Sword is excellent and heavily involves a desert culture. Don’t know many others myself, but they’re out there, I know."
29 Nov 200845 Reptile Goddess
Very detailed, nice. I lke it

:-) David Michael replies: "Thank you! I like it too. 12"
16 Dec 2008:-) J. Thomason
amazing! this is put together so well!!!
You’re right; the more I read, the more i write... they jus go hand in hand. I enjoy fantasy mostly but some of my favorites (Les Miserables, the Bible, Jane Eyre, Pride & Prejudice... etc.) are classics. I’ve read the Blue Sword and it was excellent... but Robyn McKinley does get repeptitive after a while.
I’m curious to know what your favorite books are...

:-) David Michael replies: "Heck, I even took inspiration from Upton Sinclair’s The Jungle, which is all about immigrant life in turn-of-the-century Chicago! But my favorite books? Well, for a short sampling: the Bible, Rosemary Sutcliff’s The Lantern Bearers, LOTR and The Silmarillion, C.S. Lewis’ Perelandra, George MacDonald’s Phantastes, Brian Jacques’ Mossflower, Clive Cussler’s Valhalla Rising and, what the heck, every Calvin & Hobbes comic strip ever drawn."
23 Feb 2009:-) Colton Hamshire
Awesome diction and use of imagery! I loved how the reader saw the events though a birds point of view. Clever. I’ve posted a few stories of my own if you ever want to take a look. I would appreciate it.

:-) David Michael replies: "Thanks! I don’t have a ton of time to spend around here any more, but since you’ve commented on mine, you’ve earned at least one from me. Is there one in particular you’d like me to look at? (of course I very well may read more than just it)"
9 Aug 2009:-) Monica N. Labins
OMG. Totally love this! The way you detail everything is stunning and not overpowering like some writers. Bravo! *hug*

:-) David Michael replies: "Thank you. I’m glad to hear my descriptive narration is not overpowering -- that’s something I am rather prone to. "Queen of the Desert Lord" is the sequel to this, and there might be more written in the future."
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About 'Lord of the Desert Storm':
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 • Created by: :-) David Michael
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 • Keywords: Desert, Storm, Sand, Sandstorm, Lord, Armistad, Rider, Wind, Love, Gift, Peregrine, Falcon, Canyon, City, Barren
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers...
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