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"Flowers for the Forgotten" by Steve Doyle

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Flowers for the Forgotten


I left a rose upon the rock
That bore my mother's name.
I said a prayer and promised
To visit her again.

To the old section I made my way
Where my mother had shown me
The graves of The Forgotten lay.

She had always said a little prayer
For the long forgotten people
Who lie so lonely there.

I left a rose upon a rock
That bore somebody's name.
I said a prayer and promised
To visit once again.


At midnight restless souls begin to stir
From the back an elderly voice:
I GOT A VISITOR!!!

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3 Nov 2003:-) Rachael Evans
Awww, I feel so special ^.^ I love how this poem feels! In such a short amount of time, you've made us fall in love with someone we don't even know! And their mother too ^^ It is very sweet! You continue to amaze me! I visited your webpage the other day, though I'm going to go back because I didn't get to stay very long. I love this poem, I think it's my new favorite! *huggles*
5 Nov 2003:-) Yuki Erika Radcliffe
wow. i know quite a few members of elfwood who can relate to that ghost. "I got a comment!" hehe. don't know why that's the first thing that came to mind reading this, but i felt like telling you anyway.
i really liked this poem. upon reading the title, i thought it would be gloomy, and it kinda was, until the last line. that made me laugh.

:-) Steve Doyle replies: "Yeah, I was thinking that myself when I wrote it. It's comments, I think, that make Elfwood such a fun place. More people should leave them."
6 Nov 200345 Jamie A. Hughes
**leaves a rose on the stone** I love the idea behind this. Very cool...very spooky and yet somehow comforting. Ahhh...

What I was thinking in the realm of nits was in scheme. Some stanzas have four lines, others five, and one had three. Could you level them all out in length and structure to make the poem more balanced? Unless that was what you were going for...thought I'd throw my two cents in. 2 Great work!
14 Nov 2003:-) 'Princess' Laura Hewett
Oh, how sweet, they aren't forgotton anymore!
17 Nov 200345 Maisha 'Elenwyn' Foster-O'Neal
hahahaa... *is laughing* that's funny... oh how cute, funny, whatever.. yeah.. *is grinning now* kinda reminds me how i get excited when someone new comes to visit my shelf...
Peace out,
~*Elenwyn*~
24 Nov 200345 Heather 'Istara' Sluys
I'd be pretty scared if I heard some voice rising up from a grave after I visited it . . . but it's always nice to be appreciated, ne? ^_~
27 Nov 2003:-) Miss Loraina Tubbs
oooooo lol... that was actually quite funny in a morbid, weird, and twisted sort of way... great job yet again!!

~*KYRIE*!
2 Jan 200445 Carolyn Anderson
This really made me smile, its very touching 2
6 May 200445 Lindsey M. Butler
I used to always put flowers on empty graves when we went to visit my great-grandfathers grave, this was a reminder of that, I haven't done it in so long. It's a nice idea that the spirits of the dead would appreciate a little gesture like that.
7 Nov 200545 Soul Key
I like this sequel. It makes it happier. The end made me giggle- Your such a nice writer and you've won me over. =)
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'Flowers for the Forgotten':
 • Created by: :-) Steve Doyle
 • Copyright: ©Steve Doyle. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Cemetary, Death
 • Categories: Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions, Humourous or Cute Things
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