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"The Birth of Pegasus" by Steve Doyle

SciFi/Fantasy text 9 out of 45 by Steve Doyle. ←Previous - Next→

This is a sequel to 'Minerva's Curse' Check out the illustration by Ramona C. Bogott, Pegasus' Birth

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The Birth of Pegasus

Poor girl!
Thus are you released from my curse:
Your blood seeping into the sand
As Perseus escapes
With your severed head in hand.

For your vanity you were punished;
Your beauty taken away.
You've lived as a hideous monster
Until this very day.

But I shall gather up your blood
And with it I shall cast
A creature whose great beauty
Shall never be surpassed.

A splendid steed it shall be
Capable of flight.
With magnificient wings
And a brilliant coat of white.

None who gaze upon him
Shall ever turn to stone.
Yet none shall ever tame him
Without this bridle of gold.

Therefore, Medusa
Free from any curse
Rise up again as Pegasus
For I now give you birth.

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Date	Name	Comment
12 Nov 2003	'Princess' Laura Hewett	Loading... oh so sweet! Veddy good!
24 Nov 2003	Heather 'Istara' Sluys	Loading... Fantastic! I always admire those who can re-write ancient myths like that, because I love mythology, but know little enough about it. Well done!
25 Nov 2003	Miss Loraina Tubbs	Loading... oooo veddy cool!! Loved it!! just like i loved ur other poem that I read... You know what, you are an EXCELENT poet. that is something to be envied, for I am certainly not. lol... I've tried a couple times but was never really satisfied with my result. Anyhoo, totally cool. lalalalalala... I wish my stuff was as good as this... ur so talented... heck you have THREE Mod's choices. How the heck did you do it?? sighs I'm still happy with my one!! lol... Spams ~~~~~* Queen Kyrie of Spam ~~~~*~
31 Dec 2003	Rachael Evans	Loading... HEY!!!! HOW COME YOU DIDN'T TELL ME YOU UPDATED?!?! AND HOW COME YOU DIDN'T TELL ME YOU GOT A MODS CHOICE?!?!? hangs head and is hurt Well, now that I'm over my little temper tantrum, I'd like to say that this is probably my favortie poem in your gallery. Pegasus is my favorite mythological creature ^^ You wouldn't know it to look at my gallery, but I'm not brave enough to draw him yet as I need to research wings and the like so I can get an idea of how big they would need to be to support a horse. Anyway, I didn't come here to ramble about my shortcomings. Lovely poem!!!!
2 Jan 2004	Carolyn Anderson	Loading... Mmmm.... I simply adore anything to do with ancient myths, and this is so well put together, it flows so beautifully.
5 May 2004	Lindsey M. Butler	Loading... A well deserved Mod's Choice. I love the rhythym of the poem, as well as the imagery.
21 Jul 2004	Artemis Heart	Loading... The ending was very powerful (had to say that before I forgot), it was an excellent poem and a well-deserved Mod's Choice.
15 Nov 2005	Dan Shevock	Loading... Your grasp of mythology is very good, and your presentation of myths in a modern poetry style is quite enjoyable. Good work.
31 Jan 2006	Elizabeth Wilcox	Loading... very nice--I love seeing myths put into poetry (and I am partial to a sympathetic view of Medusa . . .)
31 May 2007	Jess	Loading... What most poets don't seem to realize is that you don't have to rhyme everything. If you try to make a rhyme where it would be better off without one, the poem sometimes comes out sounding artificial and forced. You should do more poems like "The Apple." That was a great poem. I like the ideas and the imagery, but this poem, as well as the ones with the leprechauns a while back, is just sounding too much like you didn't really think about writing something good and though more about making it rhyme and fit. I know that you can be an awesome poet, if you'll just quit rhyming. I should know, I'm a university poetry teacher.
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'The Birth of Pegasus':

• Created by:

Steve Doyle
• Copyright: ©Steve Doyle. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Medusa, Pegasus, Wingedhorse
• Categories: Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters