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"The Football Game" by Steve Doyle

SciFi/Fantasy text 17 out of 45 by Steve Doyle. ←Previous - Next→

Sometimes it just doesn't pay to go all the way to the game...

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For the first time in the history of Hamilton High
They canceled the Thanksgiving Day game.
It was because They came.

The spacecraft had arrived without warning.
Appeared in the sky that very morning.
It hovered above the field at Jefferson High
About a hundred yards in the sky.

Troops had surrounded the entire location.
Instead of fans watching football
There were soldiers with a situation.

The rivalry between Jefferson and Hamilton was legendary.
A great game had been witnessed once
And talked about in circles wider than any.

To watch these two teams play
They had traveled a long, long way.
But now there would be no game
Because They came.

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Date	Name	Comment
29 Aug 2003	Rachael Evans	Loading... Okay, now I'm sorry if I've got this wrong, but I laughed because they came to watch the teams play each other right? And then everybody was all freaked out because the aliens were there. I like it ^^ Steve Doyle replies: "Yep, that's exactly it. They came all that way to see these teams play, but everyone got freaked out because they showed up."
14 Nov 2003	'Princess' Laura Hewett	Loading... haha!! That's great. I wanna see the aliens Steve Doyle replies: "The aliens want to see the game."
17 Nov 2003	Maisha 'Elenwyn' Foster-O'Neal	Loading... irony! oh, those poor aliens, came all the way and didn't get to see the darn football game! two critiques: firstly, in the third line ['The canceled the Thanksgiving Day game.'] the should be they. the other thing is, your rhyming confused me here, sometimes it went ABA, and sometimes it went ABB, and sometimes it didn't rhyme at all. well, great concept! you make me laugh! Peace out, ~Elenwyn~ Steve Doyle replies: "Thanks for pointing out that typo. The rhyme scheme is all over the place to convey the confusion on the ground."
24 Nov 2003	Heather 'Istara' Sluys	Loading... Things like this should happen (I'm not much of a football fan). Heehee, very cute. Poor, misunderstood aliens.
27 Nov 2003	Miss Loraina Tubbs	Loading... hehehe.. that one's actually quite funny, though I still prefer "The Hubble Returns"... so ya know. you have such cool ideas..... ~~~~ Kyrie ~~~~
26 Dec 2003	Ben Cameron	Loading... Must have been a good game. All that way to Earth, not to blow up the White House or take over the world but to watch a football match. Such quirky humour is a real talent to have, I envy you.
2 Jan 2004	Carolyn Anderson	Loading... laughs out loud thats great im adoring your poems as i read through them one at a time.
6 May 2004	Lindsey M. Butler	Loading... LOL Poor aliens! They just wanted to see the game. This made me giggle.