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"The Apple" by Steve Doyle

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The Apple


The apple was sweet.
A delicious piece of fruit;
Crunchy and juicy.
I enjoyed it immensely.

Plucked from the tree
At the peak of ripeness
It had been given to me
By my friend
Eve.

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6 Nov 200345 D Joelle Duran
Ah...so you're one of those that goes with the interpretation that the man had no idea what was going on--it was all Eve's fault! 12
Concise and delicious as that fateful fruit!
12 Nov 2003:-) 'Princess' Laura Hewett
HAHA!!! That's great! I'm never going to take food from my friends now that I've realized that perspective. hehe.
24 Nov 200345 Heather 'Istara' Sluys
:14icturing::

Eve: "Here, have an apple. C'mon, one little bite won't hurt, will it?"

Adam: "OMG YUMMY 0_0"

(thirty seconds later)

Adam & Eve: ". . . crap."
6 Dec 2003:-) Miss Loraina Tubbs
coolio!! but i do have one complaint... just a technichality doncha know... if indeed it is refering to Adam and Eve, it is NOT an apple!! in fact, the fruit probably doesn't exist anymore. but that's just my complaint. lol... written well, as alwayz. good job!!
2 Jan 200445 Carolyn Anderson
Ooh... A little chilling at the end there, knowing of the apple and the bible and all that. 2 very well written.
18 Feb 2004:-) Ben Cameron
I like the way you ended with the one word "Eve". It finalises the poem and, like Caraolyn said, it adds a chill to it. Nice interpretation on the bibical theme.
6 Mar 200445 Maisha 'Elenwyn' Foster-O'Neal
i think it was one of those spikey fruit things! like they have in Chinatown! yah! not an apple... but it's up to interpretation i guess... i like the format, and the end was good... hmmm... soon the foot of God shall imprint itself on their butts and they will find themselves no longer in the garden... 10
Peace and fuzzy pink dice,
~*Elenwyn*~
5 May 200445 Lindsey M. Butler
I wish I could remember the entire unit I just took on poetry so I could explain why I think this is cool. Basically the format makes this work very effectively. Short, simple, sweet, and yet deliciously wicked!
21 Jun 2004:-) Eliza Hemington
It wasn't an apple, but this was well written! ^_^
14 Jan 2008:-) Karen L. Crumley
Wow, brief and to the point. Has such impact, and makes one think. Perfect in its simplicity.
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About 'The Apple':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Steve Doyle
 • Copyright: ©Steve Doyle. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Religion, Apple, Adam, Eve
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy
 • Views: 825


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