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"The Floridian Fountain" by Steve Doyle

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In 1531 Juan Ponce de Leon was killed by Calusa Indians as he explored Southern Florida. Rumor has it that he searched for the Fountain of Youth. He never found it, but what if...
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The Floridian Fountain


Returned to the village from the hunt
In strode the smiling braves
Trailed by a troop of toddlers;
A host of bare-bottomed babes.

The chief was displeased.
What have you done?
Why have you taken these children?
To rescue them, soldiers will come.

One of the braves said, No one will come.
For these children are men
Who were playing in the magic fountain
When we crept up and discovered them.

They've crawled out of their clothes
And their helmets don't fit;
Their horses they can't climb
And their swords they can't lift.

The old chief picked up one of the lads
To get a closer look at him.
Was the wisdom of age in the child's eyes?
Little Ponce De Leon just grinned.
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6 Dec 2003:-) Miss Loraina Tubbs
*does first comment dance* I knew this one was a new one!! I love it!! it's a very different concept, and i liked it a lot. I alwayz thought of the Fountain of Youth as a fountain that kept you from aging from the moment you drink it. You've made it into something that makes you younger. it's uber spif!! yup yup!! It reminds me of the movie "Poof Point" in some wacked way. Will they continue to get younger and younger until they cease to exist?? *sighs* that would be really weird... nice job!!
12 Dec 2003:-) 'Princess' Laura Hewett
*tear* I'm so sad I didn't get here sooner so I could do the first comment dance. But! I did read it, and I laughed! I went 'hehehe!' Very cute! I'm glad I didn't find the fountain of youth, cuz I like being big and immature, not just a little kid! It's so much more fun to be tall!
26 Dec 200345 Heather 'Istara' Sluys
Been reading some history, ne? ^_~ I love writing based off the past ^_^

:-) Steve Doyle replies: "I'd been wanting to do something with the Fountain of Youth for a while, finally got to it; did some research...you know how it is."
31 Dec 2003:-) Rachael Evans
*giggles* That's cute! You always do such a nice job with things like these ^^ I like how you incorporate things that people believe in into your writing. Well done Steve!
6 Mar 200445 Maisha 'Elenwyn' Foster-O'Neal
hahahaha!! i guess the fountain's water was a little too strong, eh? maybe they should have read the directions first: "Water of Youth from concentrate. Dilute before use." oh well... i bet they're cute little buggers as kids, neh? : P i love it. Great job Steve.
Peace and diapers for the explorers!
~*Elenwyn*~
6 May 200445 Lindsey M. Butler
Hehehe. That'll teach them to bathe in the fountain of youth!
31 Oct 2006:-) Elizabeth A. Hefty
CUTE!! I really liked it. I live in Florida..... Stupid Fountain is just a hole in the ground with icky tasting water. I like yours better!!!

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About 'The Floridian Fountain':
 • Created by: :-) Steve Doyle
 • Copyright: ©Steve Doyle. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Fountain, Youth, Ponce, Deleon
 • Categories: Humourous or Cute Things, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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