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S. ´Silvestris´ Strand

"Prologue" by S. ´Silvestris´ Strand

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A possible beginning, a flashback, a fleeting glimpse of how it all started, on a cursed endless night.
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A cool wind, with a taste of snow, whispered across the tropical beaches of the small island, a reminder of the winter that still held the land in its clutches. Between narrow towers it soared, through an ancient city cloaked in twilight. Despite the approaching dusk, only a few specks of light could be seen inside the slender buildings; the wind might as well have whispered through a ghost city void of life.
This night no lights burned in Aqua Corona; no living creature wanted to draw the attention of the powers that be upon their home; none wanted to tempt fate on this night when no gods were watching, when time stood still

Through the muted gloom, there was still a sound to be heard in the waking city. The cry of a woman cut through the silence, drowned the quiet moaning of the wind.
From a window high above the city glared a defiant light; what good was concealing darkness when wails of such anguish echoed from the chamber within? If dark powers searched a sacrifice they needed only follow the sound of the woman’s cries. Better, then, to meet them in brightest light, than skulk pitifully in darkness.

In a magnificently decorated room, close to the illuminated chamber, three men waited in the soft light of a single candle. It barely lit their faces and surroundings, but millennia of tradition were not easily defied, even on a night like this. In the shadows they waited, silent, each apparently lost in his own thoughts. Every time a groan was heard from the chamber beyond their eyes flickered towards the door, and every time it remained closed their eyes moved on, grazing each other only to hastily look away.
The tallest man, neither oldest nor youngest of them, seemed to suffer the most, from the screams as well as the ominous silence in between. Whenever the anxiety in him grew too strong he would rise and pace impatiently back and forth, like a predator in a cage, only to then sink hopelessly back into his place, his head leaned into his hands. None of the three spoke, but they all knew this waiting would have been long over, had this been an ordinary night.

But this was no ordinary night over the capital of the ancient kingdom, the crown of the waters; it was New Year’s Eve, the night between the old year and the new, a night outside time and beyond the care of the gods. A night like this the spirits of the dead came to judge those of the living, and Fate walked the earth to mark her own.

***

The stars wandered slowly as the night passed, two-colored moonlight washing the waves far beneath the tower with its blazing window. The tormented moans grew weaker and more feeble, until even the hissing breath of the wind seemed stronger.
Still the three men waited in the room next door, with silence wrapped as a thick shawl over lips and ears. The most agitated of them seemed to have lost his strength as his wife’s sobs subsided. No longer he stalked the room, but sat quiet, his forehead leaning against clasped hands, as if in prayer or deep sleep. By his side the youngest man sat, his piercing gaze fixed on their father, as if with his burning stare alone challenging the old man to speak.

The dark night seemed endless. But despite the long time that passed, dawn was still not close enough. Long before its lavender light touched the horizon the woman in the room beyond fell silent. In a race against time, no mortal could hope to win.
" You can end this, father."
For the past hours the youngest man’s stare had never left his father’s face, and now he spoke for the first time the words his eyes had all along expressed. The old man didn’t move, seemed not to have heard. Silence unfolded again, heavy and choking, seemingly unbreakable. Then, slowly, the grizzled man looked up, looked at the broken, still shape of his oldest son.
" If you don’t act now, they will both be lost."
The younger brother voiced what they all thought, gave it the merciless firm shape of the spoken word. His eyes still fixed on the face of his tormented son, the old man distorted his face in indecision.
" Father."
As if this one, harshly uttered word was more persuasive than any of the previous, the old man finally turned his head to meet the younger man’s eyes. Soundless words seemed exchanged, that ceaseless conflict compressed to fill only the second the eye contact lasted. Then the old man straightened, indisputable authority in every gesture. With a single nod he gave his consent.

***

The soft light of dawn filtered between the spires and towers, delivered the city from the cold grip of the long night. Shayari, crown prince of Aqua Corona, held the hand of his exhausted wife. Still it was warm and alive, still her heartbeat pulsed through it. They had been in time, and both his beautiful wife and newborn heir were whole.
Behind him his father and brother stood silent, thinking the words none of them had yet spoken; a child born this night must not live It was the law, the code, unbroken tradition. It was a challenge flung into the face of fate to bring life into the world on this abysmal night, an invitation to certain grief.
Such a child must not live. But with a single nod of his head the old one had allowed the law set aside for the sake of the child of his daughter in law. Out of love for his son, the king had been merciful, that both child and mother might live, and already he brooded on what his arrogant decision would bring about.

The young woman squeezed her husband’s hand hard, and she wept. For her newborn, beautiful son had opened his eyes to behold the world into which he had been born.
And they were black.




All the characters, places and plots described on these pages are © Sara Strand 1997-2004. They may not be used by anyone else, in any way, without my written permission. All artwork also © Sara Strand.
To find out more more about my world and characters, visit www.silvestris.net/pangaea.




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3 Sep 2003:-) Hannah Louise Smith
I am a BIG fan of your work, and love your writing! May I do a little Fan Fiction for Pangaea? I would realy like to write a tribute to you and your magical world ^__^Sure you can, should you feel like it. I'd be flattered beyond words. If you have any questions or whatnot, you can just drop by the Pangaea Message Board, or mail me. ^____^
3 Sep 2003:-) Judith 'Judge' Mayr
I'm completely speechless. I simply love it!!
3 Sep 200345 Kyobe
Ah, Rylerion!!! I'll bet he's the most beautiful baby! I can just see what he would look like from your wonderful writing.
3 Sep 2003:-) Emily Faerber
You are almost better at English than I am, and that's the only language I speak! You really should write the story of pangaea down. I like the pace, it's not horribly fast or deathly slow. It draws attention and makes me want to read more. It's not confusing at all. As for things wrong with it? I'll have to dig for that. I can't come up with anything! 10
3 Sep 2003:-) Sarah Colley
Of course, I love the work. I think you have an amazing talent with descriptions and the piece had a very good flow.

Only two things stood out to me. The first is that a coold breeze with snow on a tropical beach seems to contradict itself to me. The other was just a formatting issue, which is, when someone is speaking after a description of their own actions, it does not require that dialogue go on a new line, it should be right after the action. Dialogue only needs to be on a new line when it is someone different speaking.

I know you said you wanted feedback on the writing, so hope that helps some little bit 2Feedback is our friend. 1Well, the breeze didn't actually carry snow - just the cool taste of it. I imagine Aqua Corona could be something like Tennesse in climate - real hot in the summer, but every few years getting just a handful of snow in late winter. Of course these things don't really come through very well in short snippets like these, but I'll keep it in mind for possible future writing, to make it sound more logical. 12
3 Sep 2003:-) Christine D. Nadon
One little question: How come his eyes are black?

I really liked this story. Lovely descriptions. You pulled me into the story right away. Keep the stories comin'!

~Christine Why his eyes are black..? It's the ooh, aah, gods' curse. 12In his culture the night of New Year's Eve is considered to be outside of time, where evil dwells and no gods are watching. Because he was born on this dark night, when no life is allowed to enter the world because of the 'superstitious' belief that it will bring evil with it, his eyes are black. A mark of the fateful day upon which he was born.Very dramatic and all.
3 Sep 200345 No one
I like it!!
20 Nov 2003:-)
Well you're English is remarkably good; in fact, if you hadn't pointed it out on your bio page, I'd never have known it wasn't your first language. What this all boils down too is: write the whole rest of the story down! This is excellent! You have a wonderful talent!
28 Nov 200345 Kristena
I think it is brilliant. Just like your art, it paints a lasting image in my head. You have amazing talent and I love your work. All of it. Thank you for sharing your talent with the world! 2
28 Dec 200345 Katrina
That was freaking awesome. I like the last line of the prolouge. Great job on this story, I hope you contine with it.
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About 'Prologue':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) S. ´Silvestris´ Strand
 • Copyright: ©S. ´Silvestris´ Strand. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Beginning, Pangaea, Birth, Curse, Brothers, King, Prince, Night, Prologue
 • Categories: Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc
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