"Mercurion´s First Flight" by Caitlin M. F. McKown

very good. I like how you kept this short and sweet^.^ though you didn't spare any emotion, so...*first comment song and dance number*

Sweet little poem. But from the description I thought you were going to tell us about how the dragon is feeling "before" the jump more than after. The line "heart rushing with the wind" conveys some of his emotions (a very nice line btw), but I had expected more. Why not make this poem a little longer and tell us of the agonies he's feeling as his clawed teeth scratch at the ledge of the rocks? Or how he's afraid to jump and his heart is beating frantically? I just think the poem would work better if you prolonged the part before the jump, making us feel how afraid he is of making that jump. That way the feelings of joy and accomplishment in the second half of the poem would stand out more clearly.

Anyway, that's my two cents ...Love it the way it is now too though Well done!

Eli