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"Pegasus in flight" by Natalie Touretsky (Gerie Aren)

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Again a translated one! It supposed to be a story of a picture coming to life in the magic of starlight:)) I suppose it still needs some editing.
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Pegasus in flight

 

Legs of the horse in the running step,

Behind the back lines open to wings,

As black as night of no star,

Reflecting the starlight like silver rings.

As great wings open and the air sings

As the feet leave the ground below,

Night sky opens to meet the beast,

The best dream I’ll ever know.

Look back, please, wait for me

You are flying so high, where to?

Into the magic of starry night

O, how I wish to go with you!

 

 

 

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2 Feb 2003:-) Anastasia I-Morn-Gwathren
*dances "v prisyadku" and falls on her butt* New poems! Sweet! I have a few suggestions to this one: "As black as THE night of no starS" I think this would flow better and "as the HOOVES leave the ground below" and also, maybe "Into the magic of THE starry night" just for the flow's sake. "THe air sings" - great metaphor! I really like this one, in short. It's got your regular touch of wonder. 12

:-) Natalie Touretsky (Gerie Aren) replies: "Thank you! 2) Your advises are priceless, because I have tendency to prononce the words as they written, and it's often differs from the way they usially said and it changes the flow2"
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'Pegasus in flight':
 • Created by: :-) Natalie Touretsky (Gerie Aren)
 • Copyright: ©Natalie Touretsky (Gerie Aren). All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Flight, Magic, Pegasus
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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