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"I am innocent" by Danielle Tribus Colman

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This is a poem about the warped nature of innocence in today's society. Actually, it's just me feeling morbid, but it amounts to roughly the same thing!
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I am innocent

 


Darkness.

A flash of silent lightning.

Thunder.

A mouth open in a silent scream.

 

I see nothing.

I know nothing.

I am innocent.

 

A long line of people;

The green-grey of uniform,

The brown of skin,

The red of blood.

 

I did nothing.

I saw nothing.

I am innocent.

 

The sound of a shot.

A scream cut short,

Flesh laid open to reveal bare bone

And the glassy stare of death.

A whimper of pain,

A scream of agony,

A gurgle of failing breath,

And a whisper:

 

I hurt no one.

I killed no one.

I am innocent.

 

A woman in a gutter,

Naked to the waist.

A knife in her back,

Surprise in her eyes.

Her belly slashed open,

Her throat slit.

 

I do not know her.

I know no one here.

I am innocent.

 

 

 

A long line of people

Inching forward,

Heads bowed.

The crack of a cudgel

Across a man’s back,

The sound dulled by mist.

 

Do not beat me.

Do not kick me.

I am innocent.

 

A stench in the air;

The stink of fear,

The smell of blood

And the putrid odour of death.

Pointing fingers,

Accusations

The soft sound of hate.

 

Look elsewhere.

Point elsewhere.

I am innocent.

 

The front of the line.

A bony, brown back,

Scored by a whiplash.

A desperate scream:

 

“No!  Not me!

It was not me!

I am inno-“

 

A shot.

 

Silence.

 

I am next.

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9 Sep 2002:-) Michael Sheridan
Wow. I mean WOW. That is powerful. MOVING. Very little makes me say that anymore, but this certainly does.
29 Sep 2002:-) Alice "Missing Enigma" Raven
I thought I commented on this... i STILL love it. Its very flowing and beautiful and etcetera. Wheee! *in case you didn't get meh em@il, my 'friend' deleted your message and I can't find your number, so i can't call. Can you em@il/phone/comment and tell me what it is??? ^_^ Bye-cha, Dani! *btw, i updated meh bio, Go seeee!*

:-) Danielle Tribus Colman replies: "Coming, coming! You've got my number, now, right?"
6 Oct 200245 Kage E. Murphy
*Mouth gaping* That was pretty intense, and I mean that in the best possible way. Very well written!

:-) Danielle Tribus Colman replies: "Thankyou, thankyou. I like my poems!"
13 Oct 2002:-) Dani 'Moonrunner' Hall
Scary. Wooo! Erm..Vivid images are seriously drawn to my mind from this piece. I didn't grasp a lot of fantasy- only horror- but an idea fluttered to my mind. Vietnam War. I don't know why...It just seems as though it'd be a war situation and the whole "brown of skin" thing gripped me. Wow. This is a powerful piece. The repetition strengthens it greatly. Pax. ~Dani

:-) Danielle Tribus Colman replies: "Am I telepathic or something? Yes, Vietnam War it is. Sort of. I wanted to give an impression of the warped nature of life, the universe and everything, you see."
22 Nov 200245 Adaon Nightwind
*Shiver*
13 Jun 2003:-) Norma Peters
This is powerful, emotional writing. You've really brought out the raw feelings of the subject. Impressive work, Danielle!
17 Aug 200345 (*)me(*)
I dont get it and i think thats a good thing...
25 Oct 2005:-) Jan Chlapowski Söderlund
I likes! 2
Lovely, expressive way of showing your feelings. Impressionistic maybe? I am fond of writing poems the same way. Have not yet got any on my page, but I would love to hear whatever you have to say about them when I get them there.
The "refrain" was a nice touch. The poem was maybe a bit long for me; in texts like this I think the author has put work into almost every word, which means I want to concentrate as much as possible. But the length also means you get more of it. 2
Good work!
25 Oct 200545 Silent Speaker
Very powerful. Very emotional...I love it, and will stick it in favorites right now. I don't do that often..But...I love this. Very powerful. Well done.
14 Nov 2005:-) Elizabeth Wilcox
This is very good . . . but I do have to wonder how you got it on Elfwood . . . I don't any the sci-fi or fantasy aspects . . .

Setting that issue aside: this poem is powerful. The refrain is especially effective.
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'I am innocent':
 • Created by: :-) Danielle Tribus Colman
 • Copyright: ©Danielle Tribus Colman. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Corruption, Death, Experience, Innocence
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