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"The Being of the Vampire" by Matthew Scott Jernstadt

SF&F Picture 4 out of 5 by Matthew Scott Jernstadt

I think the title explains it enough

I can feel the smooth skin of their necks,
Staring at the protruding veins.

I can feel the blood coursing through their veins,
Hearing their heart beating a mile away.

I can feel their fear in my head with delight,
Smelling the sweet fragrance of their blood.

I can feel their skin brush against my lips,
Tasting the fullness of their blood as I drink.

I can feel their heart slowing,
Feeling their blood as it now courses through my veins.

I can feel the sorrow of their souls,
Realizing the truth of what it means to be a vampire.

←- Owl King | A Vampire's Sorrow -→

Date	Name	Comment
1 Jul 2003	Melanie J. Teichroeb	Loading... Splendiferous! I lurve vamps ^_^ keep up the good work!
1 Jul 2003	Azrael angel of death	Loading... Truly vampiric it leaves something however perhaps you should do another more on the vampires iner perception?
1 Jul 2003	Clara Aden	Loading... Utterly haunting. Great Job with the wording and work.
2 Jul 2003	Esmeralda Eli	Loading... wow!! that was excellent! It does deserve to be MODS choice! I love the words you chose in the poem! Keep up the good work! Matthew Scott Jernstadt replies: "Thank you."
10 Aug 2003	Miguel Francis Ettema	Loading... It's dark, it's morbid, and somewhat disturbing. Congrats on the mod's choice, but I have to admit it's not the type of thing that really does it for me :/
12 Sep 2003	Amber	Loading... You have beautiful insight. And as for the person who commented on grammar; I think you're right, it's the feeling, the imagery that people see, not how many words in a verse or the lines on a page, or anything else supposedly 'correct'. I think... The poem's sincere and there's something there, in the words, that evokes such equisite empathy. That's a rare thing to have...
10 Oct 2005	Anonymous	Loading... Aye, coming from a vampire myself, a bloody good job. A bit unrealistic, but still very good
28 Sep 2006	Anonymous	Loading... I thought the wording was awkward and redundant. It lacks poetic flow. But you convey your theme nicely.
15 Jul 2008	Svenja M Vox	Loading... So sad, made me sad...mental picture, although a bit murky. It could be longer, but this is a good length. A-.
12 Apr 2009	Mike	Loading... felt sad. Very good though
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About 'The Being of the Vampire':

• Status: OK
• Created by:

Matthew Scott Jernstadt
• Copyright: ©Matthew Scott Jernstadt. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Vampire, Undead, Death, Demon, Darkness, Blood
• Categories: Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic

• Mod Pick at: 2003-07-01 12:15:43
• Views: 533

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