| 1 May 2003 |  Christopher J. Keefer | Interesting. A nice style, reminiscent of other popular D&D stories. Not my preference, but you managed to pull me in to the tale nonetheless. Good job.   Petter Dahl replies: "Thanks  I originally had several more chapters written, but they were lost. The setting isn't specificially D&D, but I suppose some inspiration come from there" | |
| 11 May 2003 |  Danielle M. E. Coombs | Interesting. I like the way you alternated between the two points of view, thus making it uncertain who is the villain, and whether there is one at all. I'm not sure about Cyn's 'High Style' - it sounded a little contrived, as if the thees and thous were flung in anywhichway.  Petter Dahl replies: "Yeah, I'm not sure how to get her flowery speech to sound more natural without completely taking out her High Style. I'm glad you like the alternating views, that was sort of the point of the style I had planned out =)" | |
