e
 

Attention! in July 2014, Elfwood.com will get a makeover! Read more about the change.

Elfwood is the worlds largest SciFi & Fantasy community.
  - 152976 members, 4 online now.
  - 9627 site visitors the last 24 hours.

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Vicky Barrett

"Love Poem (Wraith)" by Vicky Barrett

SciFi/Fantasy text 20 out of 32 by Vicky Barrett.      ←Previous - Next→
 
Tag As Favorite
 
A man falls in love, a woman falls in love, actually two women do. Who wins? Let the poem decide *eyes gleam as manical laughter eches round the building' Ok ok, I know I've been doing rubbish poems, so heres another to add to the charade. And this time, well this is a poem that I worked out in my head. And then lost when writing down.
Add Bookmark
Tag As FavoriteComment
←- Plug in Baby | Epilogue -→


"I

Love

You"

I heard her cry

But at my response

She did die,

"I love her,

I love you not"

Her body twisted, and broke

Flew into tender oak

And as the days grew long

My heart did fill full with song

My Lady, who I doth love,

Agreed to be my turtledove

But as we walked the aisle so straight

Leading to our heavenly gate

The Banshee of my past appeared

Dancing wildly, so long grew my beard

"You fool" she cried

"You doth killed me with loss of love

The price of such a crime is clear

I was made a wraith, my dear

The choice is simple,

I jolly not

You may love no other, only she,

But you may naught have any other, but me"

And so the wench from which I'd fled

Ended up being the one I wed

Her tattered garm's doth suit her well

Whilst mine portray from whence I fell

Alas my love, she passed on fast


So goes what’s past, is past…

←- Plug in Baby | Epilogue -→

DateNameComment 
14 Dec 2002:-) Panu Karjalainen
I know, I know... I've been a bad boy, haven't visited your library in aeons... I hope you still accept this humble comment.

Since I know (practically) nothing of Old English, I won't comment the style overmuch... the rhythm sounded okay to me. Then, the interpretation:

The poem was quite clear. I'd say it can be a 'normal' fantasy poem, where the poor man will be trapped for eternity with the wraith of the other woman... but he is quite cruelly punished. Yes, the wraith-woman is really mean.

Then the one I like better. The man, after marrying the woman he truly loves, hears the other woman committed a suicide. Then he is haunted by his inner self who tries to convince the man he did wrong. Yet he loves his wife. This creates such mental problems to the man that he cannot abandon the memory of the dead woman. He gets maybe a bit weird. His wife abandons him, probably thinking he's got an affair with somebody else. The man gets really miserable... I'm not sure what happens to him, then.
1 Feb 2003:-) E Purington
I love The Way You Wrote It! I am trying to write a story like that but I keep slipping into new age slang...It's VERY difficult, I applaud you for another masterpiece well done. :clapps hands together:
Not signed in, Add an anonymous comment to this guestbook...    

Your Name:
Your Mail:
   Private message? (Info)



'Love Poem (Wraith)':
 • Created by: :-) Vicky Barrett
 • Copyright: ©Vicky Barrett. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Love, Men, Poem, Wmen, Wraith
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Celtic
 • Views: 1126

Bookmark and Share



More by 'Vicky Barrett':
Woman
Creation
Remember
Dr Dawn versus Vivian
Victory : part two
Cat's in the Cradle-part three

Related Tutorials:
  • 'The Seed of Government - Part 1' by :-)Crissy Moss
  • '10 Steps to Creating Realistic Fantasy Animals'
  • 'Writing a Story, Painting a Masterpiece' by :-)Jessica Ng
  • Art Education Finder...
  •  
     

    Elfwood™ is a site for Fantasy and Science Fiction art and stories. The site was founded by Thomas Abrahamsson and is maintained by helpful assistants and moderators, owned by the Elfwood AB corporation.

    [More...]