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Karolien V Burms

"Iter" by Karolien V Burms

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a short story that I have written when I was really down, but I liked how it turned out. for the ones that have read it already I have corrected the most grammer faults I hope. If anyone finds any please let me know!
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I sit on my rock and I think, as always. Would something ever change?From what I have seen, probably not. Why am I here anyway? I know it, but I mostly donít want to know.

I am here to teach the humans and to protect her and nothing more or less. But what can I do?

Nothing, they are opinionated and donít want to know of anything else. Maybe I donít try enough myself. I bend over and look into the water, and see my face and body, it looks so human but all colours that I have like my hair and eyes resemble an element of nature: my half brown and half white-blue hair for the earth and air, my blue eyes for water and red lips like fire. For the rest I look human with no specific differences only that I wear a white simple dress. But I should have left by now. I stand up. Spread my arms. Look up, and feel how I rise from the ground. But I enjoyed enough and I immediately fly to the edge of the forest.

Who I am? I smile. I do not really know, but I am Iter which means road and way. Iím a creature that is born out of nature itself, She has made me to protect her and to save her of ruin. It hurts to see her like this, her children the trees been cut down, my brothers I hear you all cry, Iím coming! Iím coming! My heart cries but I canít get carried away. I land at the edge of the forest and I look at my brothers, I go to the nearest one and touch him. How long would he be here if I wouldnít do anything? Probably not even twelve hours. He is by the first to be cut down tomorrow. I feel the spirit in him, the dryad as people of before call it. I love them. I feel his core and take it in me and cherish him, he asks what took me so long, but does not expect an answer, he understands me, they all do. Trees donít feel hatred but love and compassion but also have a strong need to survive which is tempered by their love. I go to every tree of which I know that will be cut down tomorrow and take every core that contains the spirit of the tree in me. All these trees that will be cut down tomorrow by humans. The same that I should teach to honour Her. I donít know what to do with that, so for now I donít do anything with this. And I first save my brothers. I am done for this night. I go to my lake with the rock and let the spirits slip into the water. Where they can live until I have found a better way. But for now this is the only way. I look into the water and see how their spirits swim. Iím happy for them because they are safe now and that is now the most important for me.

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25 Sep 2004:-) Kaushik 'Kazarelth' Narasimhan
This is COOL i mean SUPERCOOL but actually, i was confused at first, then it came out.
You are natural nature's way! Keep writing stuff like this.

1 Karolien V Burms replies: "thank you very much!"
26 Sep 2004:-) TM Feighery
Ditto everyone else's constructive criticisms. I like how you portray this. Keep on writing and it'll keep getting better.

2 Karolien V Burms replies: "thanx!"
26 Sep 2004:-) Ceddy
The grammar mistakes are still there (particularly the use of whit instead of with, which was rather annoying) but the concept behind the guardian is genius. You just need practice on your English skills.

1 Karolien V Burms replies: "I know I need some practice but I'm working on it,thank you!"
28 Sep 200445 D Joelle Duran
I like this. I like how you describe the trees and how she interacts with them and takes their spirits out and into the water. Poor trees, but better than losing everything when they're cut down. Keep writing!

:-) Karolien V Burms replies: "thank you!"
2 Oct 200445 Tara B. Miksik
Evil humans! Ok enough anger rage, this story rocks! Great details and wording! Have you read 'Learning Their Language' by Marta Williams? It's an excellent book about intuitive learning and listening to not only animals but also the earth and trees, for all have voices, it's just up to us to take the time to listen. You portray the spirits of the trees so magnificently well, take it from someone who's listened to them before!12

1 Karolien V Burms replies: "thank you! no, I don't know the book but it seems to be a good one, when I find it I'll read it!"
12 Nov 200445 Manda Howard, (sing. ad luna)
I’d like to read this in your native tongue...where are you writing from? France? Germany? Some translations are better than others (Latin poetry sounds better in English than Chinese poetry, for example) but something is always lost. I wish I were multilingual.

:-) Karolien V Burms replies: "thanks I’m glad you liked it! I’m from Belgium, dutch is my native tongue."
9 Jan 2005:-) James 'Jimbo Fett ' Inwood
I agree with jess, nice story. First one ive read that's about Dryads.
9 Jan 200545 Jessica 'Blue Thanatopsis' Stachyra
The beginning was very catchy, overall very nice!

2 Karolien V Burms replies: "thank you for commenting"
11 Nov 2005:-) Rasha Al Najjar
wow, I like it, it almost makes me feel bad to be human and hits home on how selfish we are when we destroy everything around us for our own good.
27 May 2006:-) Alexandru Moisi
very nice, I like the idea of a protective spirit..sounds a little like the essence of the elves... I think the first part is really good and somehow in then second part, when something actually happens..well it takes away some of the magic... hmm there are two different styles and I think you should choose one and stick with it...
Otherwise very good, all the best

:-) Karolien V Burms replies: "I haven't really noticed that I was handeling two styles. When I wrote this it was in my native language dutch. And I had to change it a couple of times to get the essence and the magic in the story the way I wanted. I think that is what happened."
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'Iter':
 • Created by: :-) Karolien V Burms
 • Copyright: ©Karolien V Burms. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Dryades, Nature, Trees
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Celtic
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