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Victoria Bellamy

"Epona and Abel" by Victoria Bellamy

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The start to my version of Tristan and Isolde. I added a bit of a King Arthur feel to this story, based on the scenes I picked out of books by Sarah Zettel. If you've haven't read any of Sarah's books, read them. They are really great! Enjoy the story anyway! I was also influenced by celtic myths. This is a story for my Godmother Heather Naylor, cause I know she'd like it and because she's so great and I think she deserves this
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Epona prepared for her morning ride, her chestnut coloured mare was stamping impatiently, eager for his work to begin. Epona finished adjusting the saddle and straightened up, brushing her long, glossy, light blonde hair out of her face as she mounted. After steering the horse out of the gate and onto the cobbled road beyond, she encouraged the horse into a gentle canter. As always she headed for the beach to watch the sun rise over the broad horizon.

When she reached the narrow path to the beach she pulled on the reins and as the horse slowed, she began the descent. The beach she always visited was situated below steep chalk cliffs and could only be reached by a man-made path her father had built; this made the descent not so steep and the beach easily accessible. The horse panted heavily when they reached the beach and Epona stretched over and stroked the animal’s silky mane gently, after a while the panting stopped.

Epona gazed lovingly over the beach and dismounted; she tied the horse to a nearby tree and gave it some water from her wineskin. She began walking up the beach looking at the damage last night’s terrible storm had inflicted. Tree trunks were strewn all over the place and large baskets and other household items were dotted about too. It was then that she realised that there was an unusual shape at the far end of the beach; she quickened her pace to try and reach it, climbing over logs and trees as she went.

**********

Abel was lying awkwardly in the sand, the remains of the boat around him. He didn’t remember anything about last night only that his ship had been hit by a terrible wave and that all people on board were ordered to abandon ship, looking blearily around he now knew that he was the only survivor. He had swum to shore and was so exhausted he had passed out, his whole body ached and his head was screaming. From somewhere in the distance he heard the soft footfalls of someone approaching, he slowly lifted his head trying to see although every second became an even greater effort. Once he had managed to raise his head for long enough he found himself staring into a pair of frosty yet angelic, crystal blue eyes. Her skin was the colour of fresh milk and her delicate features were framed by fair hair that fell in waves past her shoulders. Abel wanted to stare into those blue eyes forever but she had already looked away.

**********

Epona stared bewildered at the man before her.His boat must have been caught in the storm last night;she thought sadly gazing around,by the looks of things the boat was destroyed along with some most of the crew aswell.She gazed at the man again, and into his deep, rich chocolate brown eyes trying to work out what to do next. She couldn’t help notice how his soft, gently curly brown hair was falling around his face and how his skin was darker than her own by several shades.He must live somewhere hot;she concluded,and spend most of his time in the sun.

Looking at the man’s state she had to get him back to Mithrell Hall soon, he had deep, long cuts all over him and large, purple bruises were appearing on his arms and legs. The problem was she only had one horse and she wouldn’t be able to heave this man all the way up the long path to the top of the cliffs on her own and she didn't really want to leave him just lying there. I needshe decided,help but from where?There was absolutely nothing here except tree trunks and battered baskets and they couldn’t help her, or could they?

**********

Abel watched bleary eyed, as the woman with the blue eyes got up and went over to the nearest log, she then proceeded to drag it haphazardly along the beach. When she had travelled roughly about fifty yards she dropped it and went to fetch another one, and another. Abel stared in admiration as the woman arranged the logs in a pile and then hurried over to one of the ruined baskets. To Abel’s surprise she began to dismantle it and after a while hurried back to the logs clutching two splinters of wood.

When she reached the pile, Abel saw her fumble in her dress for something, eventually pulling out two small pieces of flint. Abel saw her strike the two together near the two splinters, a spark flickered briefly but then died. The woman tried again and this time it worked, the wood alighted and breathing gently on them, she carried the now burning splinters over to the pile of gathered logs. Clambering up onto the top of the pile, she laid the splinters in amongst the wood and then hastily clambered down and walked towards him, slapping her hands in triumph.

**********

Epona was exceptionally pleased with her handiwork and in no time at all the wood was happily burning away, the guards on Mithrell’s walls couldn’t possibly miss or mistake that sign for help. She returned to the man, intending to help in what way she could with his injuries and when she reached him she knelt gently down beside him.

For a brief moment she considered that he might speak a different language but those thoughts were laid to rest when he mumbled something. She didn’t quite catch it however, although she thought she recognised individual words.
“Are you alright?” was all she could think to say, he slowly nodded his head in reply.
“I’ve signalled for help, my kinsmen will be here soon to help you back to our hall.” She paused for a moment and then said softly “What’s your name? Who are you?”
The man gave no response, in fact he must have fainted of exhaustion since his eyes suddenly closed and his whole body went limp. Epona sighed and kept watch over him in the cool morning air, but in her mind she was begging the help from Mithrell to come soon.

**********

The guards atop Mithrell’s heavily protected outer walls first saw the smoke around lunchtime. They knew it was a sign of help, but from whom? They had been informed that the lord’s daughter Lady Epona had gone riding before dawn and had not returned. The hunt had also left before dawn to catch the day's evening meal and they had not returned either. When they had glimpsed the smoke and realised that it was a sign of distress, they had alerted the lord at once and he had sent some of his most loyal followers on horseback to find out what was wrong and so far even they had not returned. Everyone was growing anxious, and it didn’t help that the so called Wisewoman was wailing at the top of her voice “This day is cursed. There comes a man who will ruin all our hopes and dreams, do not trust him for he will lead us to our doom!”

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19 Jul 2006:-) Musty Zein
Another awesome story, very well written. The ending reminds of an athurian story involving the siege perilous but i digress. Well written story and cant wait for more

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "The Writer: Hi again! I am really pleased you like this story in particular. I have always wanted to write a kind of Arthurian Tale so it was great fun and Sarah Zettel's books really inspired me. So thanks, Part two is on it's way soon! (must start writing that now!)"
25 Jul 200645 Maxine Cox
Nice story Victoria, is he or isn't he the cause of imminent doom? Comments - Epona's mare would definitely have a name, a Lady would be riding her favourite. Also, her hair would probably be covered, being a Lady, but you could always have her remove her headdress once she was away from the castle down by the beach - maXine 1

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Yeah! Thanks for pointing those things out. It didn't occur to me at the time about the horse thing but now you mention it it would make sense! As for the headdress thingy, I was going along the Tristan and Isolde movie route and in the previews she didn't have a headdress but that would make sense too! Anyway thanks for the tips again! "
30 Jul 2006:-) J.N. van Betteray
O. I like the end it's good.

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Hey thanks! I haven't even started Part Two yet but i'm sure it'll come in due course. I really like the ending too! "
9 Aug 2006:-) Elizabeth A. Hefty
Honest it somewhat reminds me of Tristan and Isolde... Just at the beggining with the whole "shipwrecked" thing 2

A little bit of a technical thing here,

I needshe decided,help but from where?

Would be better read,

I need help, she decided. But from where?

Just my humble opion.

Once more,
Walk in Starlight

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Damn! I am found out! I was hoping no-one would notice. I totally except your humble opinion. I twas meant to be that but in a moment of madness I changed it! I was going to fix it but I couldn't be bothered! Thanks for the comment. Wlak in the Starlight through the Abyss my friend! 12"
15 Aug 2006:-) C. 'Cain' Brooks
In all honesty, its a bit mushy for my tastes, but well written in any case. I liked how you meshed the different perspectives of the different people together. They fall rather neatly into place. Again, the thought piece stuck out, but it didn't ruin the flow of the story. Great job! ^^

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "After all the serious sadness stuff I said to myself I have to write something overly mushy and this was the result! Another person has commented on the thought thing and in the next part I promise i'll sort it out! Thanks again!"
17 Aug 2006:-) William R Rought Jr.
I love it awesome beginning to a great story! Keep up the good work!

I did have some difficulty reading it though. The characters thoughts being inserted in areas was someone distracting. I used to do that with my stories as well, until someone helped me with that. Here is an example.

"Epona stared bewildered at the man before her.His boat must have been caught in the storm last night;she thought sadly gazing around,by the looks of things the boat was destroyed along with some most of the crew aswell."

You could easily turn that into narrative and it still be clearly understood as the thoughts of the character and not interrupt the "flow" of the story. Example:

Epona looked in saddened bewilderment at the man and the wreckage around her. It was obvious that his boat had been caught in the storm last night and had been destroyed, leaving him as the only survivor.

As you can see there are no inserted "Thoughts" of the character and you still got the point across. It also eliminates the need to code in the italics making it easier on you when you prepare your stories for tickets. My stories have much improved since I started doing that. I hope this helps you make your stories even better than they are now!

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "WOW! Well erm.... thanks! WOW! How can you sit and write all of that, but thanks it was really helpful and I have noticed that i have been doing the thought thing. I haven't thought abaout it until now and your idea would be soooooo much easier.Thanks for having the patience to type such a enormous comment!"
20 Aug 2006:-) Robert Hansen
Dun Dun Dun. Okay, sorry for the dramatics. Nice stuff here too. You must like blue eyes, I've seen them in both of the stories you've written. If I may make a suggestion though, a small one. In one part of the chapter you have she decided between two parts of the same thought. I need she decided help. That's it though. Good job.

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Thanks! I don't mind the dramitics (I did them myself when I finished writing 12) I am a total blue freak which is weird since I'm not blue-eyed! The thing about the need/help thing is just a mistake I promise! Thanks again!"
29 Aug 200645 Emily A. Coning
I don't like some of your comma usage in there, some should be new sentences, others semicolons, that kind of stuff that I seem to think I know something about. 12

I really liked this one! When are you going to be done with part two?!

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Thanks! I had a serious comment thing when i wasa younger and I just stuck a comment in between each couple of words so I'm just pleased my sentences make sense! I don't even know what semi-colons are and how to use them! I just stick to commas and full stops. I makes reading and writing i find a lot easier! I am writing part two I promise! "
31 Aug 2006:-) Elke Van_den_Broecke
Wow! How come I haven't read this one (shame on myself). Again a very nice story. You become better with the story you write, you really do!!!

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Thanks and they do say that practice makes perfect. Don't shame yourself I get people saying things like what stories have I read? I've already read that one! So it doesn't matter! Thanks for the comment!"
9 Oct 200645 Edward Ramirez
Nice introduction. I like the description too. Looking forward to read more of the story.

12 Victoria Bellamy replies: "Aww thank you. I am planning the second part but I'm suffering from severe writters block (for about 9 months) so I don't know when it'll be up. I'd love for you to read it when it is though!"
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About 'Epona and Abel':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Victoria Bellamy
 • Copyright: ©Victoria Bellamy. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Epona, Abel, Tristan, Isolde
 • Categories: Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Celtic, History-based, Parallel or Alternate Reality/Universe
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