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"Wolf (Poem)" by Victoria G. ´Vix´ Olmstead

SciFi/Fantasy text 37 out of 37 by Victoria G. ´Vix´ Olmstead. ←Previous - Next→

This is a poem that kinda reminds me of a story I'm working on. It's about a werewolf.

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Seen only in the light of the full moon
Praying the morning might come soon
Knowing only the animal within
Fur covers every inch of his skin
Wolf-like features take over his face
Fangs grow in where his teeth held place
He’s changing without control
Still he’s worried about his soul
He feels the demon inside
During the day it continues to hide
Only appearing at the moon’s peak
Suddenly he has an animal’s physique
The animal hunts for three nights
On the last he’ll chose the one he bites
Every month he turns someone new
He’s no longer sure what the animals will do
The animal lives off of a crimson flood
The animal feeds off of human blood
The night of one full moon
He chose his prey a few moments too soon
A hunter flipped him on his back
The moment he began his attack
Shot silver through the animal’s heart
The animal façade falls apart
‘You shall not live through another day
Each and every animal needs to pay
The evil that grew inside
No longer has a place to hide
You may now see that good will win
At least until the evil that hides under my skin
Finds a way to break from its core’
The hunter smiled and shot once more

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Date	Name	Comment
26 Dec 2003	Elvis	Loading... This is some good stuff. Keep this stuff coming, I like it. Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "Thank you! I plan to keep it coming until i can't write any more! I'm glad you like it! thanks for commenting!!!"
24 Jan 2004	Ultima_Psyco Macias2006@hot...com>	Loading... Hey again sweetheart...That last piece was good work..I really liked it...I hope u come out with more...By the way...How old r u?...U can email me that answer instead of posting it. Lol...Lata Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "i'm pleased you think it's good work. I'm glad you liked it. I will be posting as soon as i can. Thanks for commenting."
12 Feb 2004	Kate Aimee Conrick	Loading... I love the theme of this poem and how it encorporates all this technical wolf-info into it ^_^ The only thing I'd change would be to put the rhyme on every second line instead of rhyming every two lines together, because that way each line encorporates the whole paragraph, instead of just the next line. But lol, thats just my opinion. what I reaaaally love is the way you ended it so simply 'The hunter smiled and shot once more' Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "Thank you muchly. I'm glad you like it. I tried to explain the wolf. I'm glad it worked. I may try your rhyme scheme suggestion. It sounds rather like a good idea. Thank you muchly and Thanks for commenting."
13 Feb 2004	Kate Aimee Conrick	Loading... "your rhyme scheme suggestion" hehe i cant really claim responsibility for that idea, hehe im just copying shakespeare =^___________^= good luck in trying it out though, ill be watching to see what you come up with ^_^ Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "hehe o0o... i like shakespeare he's good!!! cept i loathe iambic pentameter but mostly i loate it for a friend. hehe thanks for commenting. and i will still attempt it and post the results. "
18 May 2004	Tasha-Ann N. Torres	Loading... o.O Very nice indeed. Poor wolf. Damn hunter. Very good poem! ^_^ Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "Why thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the comment."
16 Sep 2004	Kristina 'Aryana' Siers	Loading... Poor werewolf! I like it, anyway! Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for commenting."
21 Feb 2006	Rochelle Leya Watts	Loading... Overall I like this poem. The beginning starts out well in the portayal of how the werewolf feels about his condition. But I think it is a little to enslaved(the poem that is) by the ryhmes. For example, "Only appearing at the moon’s peak/ Suddenly he has an animal’s physique", is not a bad couplet as far as technical areas go. But it lacks the feel some of the other lines have and I think it is due to trying to get the ryhme in there. I would be interested in seeing this same poem unryhmed. Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "Hmmm i think you may very well have a point there about being enslaved by the rhyme. I may look into a rewrite. I'm glad you also liked it a bit as is though. Thank you for commenting! "
18 Mar 2006	Bagheera	Loading... i'm curently writing something about a werewolf and a hunter. I really like the ending line alot as well, it kind of says that thats waht the hunter does wich suits it. Superb! Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "I'm pleased you enjoyed it. I also enjoy the last line though i have a few friends who thought it sadistic. haha Thank you very much for commenting! "
16 Aug 2006	Anonymous	Loading... Hey i'm new on this site and i've got to say that is one good poem. I don't think i've ever seen anything as good! Victoria G. 'Vix' Olmstead replies: "Wow I must say I am quite honored by this compliment. Thank you very much! and many thanks for commenting. "
29 Dec 2009	Canus lupus lycoon	Loading... the hunter will die by my teeth alone