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Dave Cripps

"Wizard -chapter 1-Fragment" by Dave Cripps

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This was my entry to a well known newsagents competition. You had to write the first 500 odd words to your book and send it in. And I.....didn't win. Didn't even come close. Oh well here it is any way.
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From up here Nai could see his entire world. On his free day he would climb to the top of his masters tower and gaze for hours across the city, sometimes it would be way past midday before he made up his mind to descend. Way below him the castle was laid out like one of his masters models small enough to grasp in his boyish hands. In front of him the city of Boduan stretched out before coming to a halt at the dockyards, he could clearly make out the walls jutting out into Trum Bay and the sea gate, open for now as a sleek elven ship made its way into the calm, sheltered harbour before the docks. The walls with their attendant road swept back inland to his right and left studded occasionally by defensive towers and barbican gateways.

Moving around the tower Nai could make out the small ant-like figures of travellers making their way to and from Boduan and other cities far away. To the southeast the mountain stronghold of Fadren, Nai had heard stories of Goblin raiders attacking that city, indeed he had watched the Kings Knights ride out to relieve it on more than one occasion.

To the northwest his hometown of Pen-Y-Trum, not as large as Boduan or even Fadren and consequently of little interest to the Goblin tribes. Pausing in his visual sweep of the city Nai wondered how his family were faring now after last winter. Smiling he remembered his older brothers, Terwyn and Huw, they would have helped his Da on the land and his sister Lydia would have help Ma. They would not have been left wanting for much.

Annoyingly Nai was still the ‘last little yellow chick’ in his mothers eyes even now he was an uncle to his elder brother Terwyn's new-born son Tomos. His Ma had cried when he had left nearly two years ago.

His master Aeron, the wizard, had spotted the ten year old Nai's potential when passing through Pen-Y-Trum. He had returned days later accompanied by no less than two of the Kings' Knights, which had caused quite a stir and had given his family a brief period of fame among their neighbours.

"This boy has the potential to become a great wizard one day," Aeron had told his Da in confidence, although Nai was eavesdropping he was still surprised later by Aerons' insistence that he travel with him back to Boduan, of all places, to take up an apprenticeship in the Kings' castle! How could his parents refuse the royal wizard, especially when they were offered an upkeep of ten gold crowns per year. Nai got half to pay for his expenses three were paid to his parents and two were kept in trust for them by Aeron. Overall this would ensure that his family would not find themselves in need with the loss of a son.

Nai although nearly twelve with his brown-red hair and thin frame was not very big for his age and would find himself the target of some of the other city lads' cruel jokes. If it wasn't for the friendship of one of the younger soldiers in the city guard he would be alone. His friend, Shadrack, was a few years older about sixteen and as tall as a tree though as thin as a branch yet strong for all his lack of muscle. The combination of Nai and Shadrack was enough to attract other lads into their small gang. And on their free days they would gather together to go on some adventure or other in the teeming city streets.

Far below him Nai could make out his master Aeron talking to someone he did not recognise. The woman, another wizard, for he could make out that much detail, was apparently having an argument with his master as they walked across the courtyard towards the Lady's House.

Near the inner bailey barbican he could make out the guard about to change. The relief saluted and took up their positions in a complex ritual which in the eyes of a small boy seemed very militaristic and impressive. But what really grabbed his attention was the lanky figure of Shadrack, two towels draped across his back making for the moat bridge. Sometimes it would be way past midday before he made up his mind to descend, but with Shadrack apparently going swimming Nai did not need to wait.

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14 Jan 2008:-) Dave Cripps
Come on someone must have had a read of it.......

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "Does this mean I have to write the rest of it?"
16 Jan 2008:-) Dave Cripps
I read it. But that don’t count really.

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "You don’t count! "
29 Feb 2008:-) Dave Cripps
That told you! Get your finger out you lazy git! Write more!

21 Dave Cripps replies: "You stay out of this and get back to your cheapo paints....."
11 Mar 2008:-) Jacob Bowdin
Ah! The clones are here!

::runs around in a circle::

Ahem, sorry, that happens sometimes. Anyways, cool little story. To bad there is not more to it!

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "There is more of it but someone is way too lazy to bother... who could that be I wonder? I will add more soon. (Soon what a great word...)"
12 Jun 2008:-) Jason robert bates
Finish it or else MUAHHHH MUAHHHH MUAHHHH MUAHHHH *COUGH* *COUGH* *hack* *hack* *snort* oh never mind!

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "Erm... I have a great Epilogue for this... Now I need a middle bit 12"
14 Jun 2008:-) Jason robert bates
Yes, like the teachers brainwash into you: begining middle end (well, at least mine did, but Iwent to public school. In America. Witch is like, totally messed up.)

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "I know what you mean. But ... ooo... I can’t tell. it’s all very exciting. But it was part of a larger project... language ... say no more... "
17 Jun 2008:-) Jason robert bates
oh, now you’ve captured my interest. poor me, my work will never show up because I cant figure out how to change the word document to html sigh, my life is over 8

20 Dave Cripps replies: "You know what? I can’t even remember how I did there 3! I think it had an option to save as Html. (AKA: Gibberish) But I had to make sure not to amend them when saved like that. Then again I was using Apple Works. If you know what you’re doing then adding the html yourself might work. But don’t ask Chris he charges... 12"
24 Sep 2008:-) Sandra van Iersel
soon is a pretty abstract word isn’t it? I mean that comment was from MARCH! You could’ve written at least a few more pages, upload! uh, what I meant was: This is pretty good, last time you acted as if I would die when I read this 10 I sure would like to read MORE of it and I want to tell you I like the name Nai!

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "Erm well I even answered late...
Oh yes where was I? I was intending (Was there is that word again) to do more but some slave driver wants me to paint things. I have a nice plan of where this is going though. Nai is a bad corruption of Nye as in Anyewyn (Spelt wrong). His island being a sort of Wales in the sea hence the names. And Shadrack is a Bible name really but old British films always have a Welsh bloke called Shadrack Williams... it’s a bit of a joke. But then you would have to have seen loads of old films... "
25 Sep 2008:-) Dave Cripps
HAH Soon is a word he doesn’t know the meaning of 13
Lazy git I bet he’s painting something or something like that.

:-) Dave Cripps replies: "I have a Dictionary...... it’s propping up the table...."
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About 'Wizard -chapter 1-Fragment':
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 • Created by: :-) Dave Cripps
 • Copyright: ©Dave Cripps. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Magic, Castle, City, Elven, Ship, Friends
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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