"Katrina´s Resolution" by William A. Thorn

Good use of ye olde um language! You've got a good range to your stories and yet again you put so much into such stories/poems. I'd like to hear more on Katrina. It's really tempting to hear of someone called 'Katrina of the fireblood'.

William A. Thorn replies: "I am working on a story for her, but I hold this character in such high regard that I am finding it difficuly to come up with something I feel worthy. Most importantly, however, is that I am working on it!"

I know so very little about prose/poetry that I can't think of any advice for this, other than that I liked it. It is so refreshing to visit a portfolio filled with pieces that differ so completely! Good job!

William A. Thorn replies: "Coming from someone so talented, I am happy to hear it!"

Thanks for leaving a comment on my fairy tale. I loved this piece. You can imagine Katrina in a hall of warriors rousing them with her words. Wonderful!

William A. Thorn replies: "Thanks!"

*sigh* Yet another really awesome piece. This is just incredible. I can't write poetry worth a darn, although I've tried from time to time. *considers putting one of her poems back up on her shelf* Well, I'll let you know when I get my next stuff up so you can come leave me some wonderful comments like you did before. Your advice was very well appreciated!

William A. Thorn replies: "Thanks so much for your comments. If there is anything I have learned, it is that something put on a shelf should always be ready to be pulled back off! This piece was very hard for me because I am not a poetry reader nor writer. I really had to get into the emotion that fueled the character's resolve, and to do that I listend to music that invoked in me the emotions that I wanted to invoke in with this piece. As I went along, I read it aloud to see if it did stir such emotion. That would be my only advice for poetry, I suppose, since I simply am not a prose writer. =)"

This is an almost perfect piece of prose-poetry or whatever you want to call it. Reading it aloud was the best thing you could have done-it means there isn't a syllable out of place. The only thing that spoiled the effect slightly for me was the grammatical error in the 'Olde English'.

I learned a lot as a fantasy writer about the uses of 'thou' but it's a bit difficult to explain in the space I have here so what I am going to do is put it up on my webpage (http://glaed.tripod.com) under 'Musings'. Hope it helps!

William A. Thorn replies: "Thanks! I am going to check that out."

Wow, this is taking longer than I thought...(5 pages and counting). Expect it Sunday (or Saturday if I really get my socks on...)

William A. Thorn replies: "Regardless, I have read it and you have done a good job."

Sweet! I like the ending! This is really quite excellent, you have a gift

William A. Thorn replies: "Thank you. Compared to the beginning, the end had little work done on it, and I wasn't quite sure if I liked it."

Woah. How do you do that?!?

William A. Thorn replies: "Read the above replies and couple that with a strong sense of the character I had, and this is what you get."

Zingzing! (Alice has had too much candy...but there's so much left over after Christmas!) Wow! That was *very* spiffy. *nod* No, really! Ignore my valley-girl speech. It comes of too much sugar and too little sleep. *nod* OK. I am going to make a great effort, and like totally ditch that valley gurl side of me!

No, really.

Oh lol wait I gotta say this before I become sensible again. I just saw that the muffin girl commented on your page. LOL! She always makes me laugh...doesn's she make you laugh? She makes me laugh. A lot of people make me laugh. ^_^

I am being sensible now. And, as I have been positively Inspired by the readings of such documents as our country's noble Declaration of Independence and Articles of Confederation and Constituion et. al., I shall be conversing in run on sentences, thus following the example set by our founding fathers so many years ago.

First off, I have read many of the comments left by those who came before me, and I find myself quite confused. I can only deduce that there was an original version and what I have read was a revision. You see, these people are talking about thou's and thy's, which have never been my strong point. And, in reading this piece of work, I find myself, again, quite confused as there are no thou's and thy's. Therefore, I comment.

Second, Kim Cherry said that you could really imagine Katrina in the great hall rousing her warriors to a fight. Personally, while I was reading it I found myself envisioning her in the battlefield, bloodstained and weary, surrounded by disheartened soldiers, and lighting a fire in their hearts with her strong words. Metaphorically, of course.

Third, I very especially like the idea of a girl doing all this! Is very spiffy, yes. *nods empathetically* Yusyus and furthermore, though I think I said this before, I can see her when I read this. Like, really *see* her, you know? I think my valley girl side may be emerging once again.

You have great talent, sirrah. Pray, continue!

William A. Thorn replies: "To begin with, thank you for your praise. Next, this piece is revised. I may have mentioned that in the description but I don't recall off-hand. Next, I did write this while thinking of her looking over a battle aftermath. Click the link I provided above and you'll see a pic of her."

This is a really beautiful piece. The imagery was masterful and I loved the ending. Very well done!

William A. Thorn replies: "Thanks for your praise. Maybe someday I'll get the time and the energy to start writing again. There doesn't seem to be enough of either right now."