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"Incubus" by Ashley R. Wynn

SciFi/Fantasy text 13 out of 19 by Ashley R. Wynn. ←Previous - Next→

I don't write much poetry. This little image snuck up on me. This damsel in distress made her thoughts to me clear.

I've always loved that fantastic breed of demon, the incubus, or the succubus if you like females. :D The spawn of Satan and Lillith, Adam's first disobedient wife. Fantastic mythology.

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Incubus

I'm feeling scarily romantic,

a little too serious about nothing.

A strange pale demon

slipped into my sleep

last night,

and I've been trying to

banish the beast

from my late evening thoughts.

But I can see him

lurking in the growing shadows.

He's watching me,

waiting patiently

for the right moment,

the right amount of darkness

for him to touch me and take me away

to the darkest of underworldly places

And I want to be stolen away,

to be kept small and quiet,

to be hidden from the eyes of men.

←- Mushrooms & Rabbit Fur | Jenny: The Elf's Maid -→

Date	Name	Comment
24 Jun 2005	Colleen 'Gabriel' Holt	Loading... Darkly humourous? I don't see it. It's morbid and extremely interesting, though. Ashley R. Wynn replies: "Darkly humorous? Huh? Now I'm confused. But I'm really glad you're interested. "
8 Sep 2005	Adylia Adylia@luu...com>	Loading... You really should write more poetry! That was soo amazing! Love it! ^^ Ashley R. Wynn replies: "I should; but it's not one of those things I can force. I've got a couple other poems up here: Jenny, the Elf's Maid, and Maneater."
18 Sep 2005	Lisac3	Loading... Great poem. It expresses some intense emotions - at least, I think they're intense, because in this poem I see myself a while back - without that angsty, flowery blah blah that you so often see, but still has a lovely sound and rhythm.
10 Nov 2005	Keith D. Brooks Jr.	Loading... A very nice poem with great imagery. I love mythology and the incubus is definitely interesting as a subject. For someone who can't write poetry to well, i do enjoy reading good poetry.
11 Jan 2006	Wolfy	Loading... aside form the bible story Lilith was originally an ancient goddess of fertility if I'm not mistaken.. but aside from that bit of almost useless knowledge I wanted to say I love the poem and keep writing
31 Jan 2006	Anonymous	Loading... I really enjoyed it.good job
11 Apr 2006	K. ´Karahatay´ Fink	Loading... I guess I don't know very much about Incubus, and that probably explains why it didn't make sense to me. I feel kind of bad - this isn't my usual type of comment, but honestly, i didn't understand the poem so I don't feel justified critiquing it. Ashley R. Wynn replies: " Go read up on incubus and succubus over at Wikipedia or somewhere. Then come back and try the poem again. "
10 May 2006	Dan Shevock	Loading... Well, I'm not the only one, but I like this poem. The form is quite fresh for elfwood, and it's very descriptive, in an almost matter-of-fact way. Ashley R. Wynn replies: "If you mean by "fresh" that there ain't no elves and it don't rhyme. . ."
19 Dec 2006	Stephanie 'Pegacorna' Nichole Small	Loading... I really enjoyed this poem (especially the end), although probably not as much as I would enjoy the incubus himself. wink
27 Apr 2008	Jessica J Zimdars	Loading... i like this piece, at this time in the morning something has to really interest me to actually read it, so this was great. it is hard to tell if the you in the poem really wants to be free of the demon or not.
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