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"Jenny: The Elf´s Maid" by Ashley R. Wynn

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Some male elves have been known to use their natural gifts of enchantment to overcome certain reluctances of members of the other gender. :D And if that doesn't work they might resort to using alcoholic spirits or other mind fogging drugs.
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Jenny:

The Elf's Maid



A strange, barefoot elf came to me

Grey-eyed and long hair

He spoke poetry

In my mind

In my ears

Gave me books to read

Introduced me to Jack

Showed me quiet places

Under the trestle

By the river

To think

He had more energy than my

ADHD, red-haired brother

We drank a fifth of Old Crow on

Our trek up a Ouachita Mountain

To a vacant, hollow fire tower

We painted skeleton trees,

We vandals

We bad animals

And I fell where there were no stairs

We sat in my room

On my bed on the floor

Got stoned on homegrown tops,

We sat in my roommate's bed

And got drunk on

liquor and looks,



We sat on his

delicious-smelling

Buddha-bed,

Drinking and smoking

Until he was on top

Of me, trying to

Climb inside



I stopped him then

And his girlfriend

Came home

Damn his pointy ears.

I like her.

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11 Nov 2004:-) Remi Jonathan Eastley
*first comment mashed potato* I love this...modern free verse about an elf, hee. Delicious combination 1 "we vandals / we bad animals" I love, it just sounds so silky to the ears. The whole thing flows very well, there's no jagged bits or clunky phrasing, I feel. Although I don't know from poetry - but I know I like this!

:-) Ashley R. Wynn replies: "Woohoo! 1 Doesn't matter what you know about poetry. I'm just glad you didn't whine that it didn't rhyme. 1"
12 Nov 2004:-) Wendy Bittnerová
I really enjoyed this...it did flow smoothly and created clear images. Nice work! *smiles*

1 Ashley R. Wynn replies: "*wiggles* Thank you, Wendy!"
2 Feb 200545 Larissa Image
You're right, the ending is great! The whole poem is.
11 Jun 2005:-) Monkeyflower
I love the 'damn his pointy ears'! great modern verse, im glad it doesnt rhyme. theres no huge clumpy saga bits and its incredibly fluent - write more stuff like this!

6 Ashley R. Wynn replies: "Erm... I'll try. I don't DO poetry very often."
9 Sep 200545 Adylia <Adylia@luu...com>
That really was awesome!! Ending was the best, I liked that! ^^
12 Apr 2006:-) K. ´Karahatay´ Fink
Hmmm... I like this poem. It's very funny- it made me grin. Fun idea, too.
28 May 2006:-) C. 'Liari' Seidel
*snrks* Fantastic. Like a bold-brush painting on the side of a rundown building.
11 Jul 200945 Heroes r us
I dont get it16
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'Jenny: The Elf's Maid':
 • Created by: :-) Ashley R. Wynn
 • Copyright: ©Ashley R. Wynn. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Elf, Fire, Mountain, Seduction, Tower
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Romance, Emotion, Love
 • Views: 1424

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