|25 Oct 2003|| Owen CR Pierce|
Mr. Monro forgot to "shake it like a polaroid pictchah"...Ah well, he is right, Shawn is starting to develop a really great and believable personality. And You spaced out the "I"s enough so they're not a problem. And I think I will comment on this again after I've had my second pot of coffee, cafeine = witty, insightful comments...Oh, and I'm excited about the next two BoL chapters, but like I said, MORE COFFEE! HAND... Sara A. Chow
replies: ""shake it like a polaroid pictchah"? I'm missing something here... Yay, you still like Shawn! And the "I"s aren't a problem with you, good good! COFFEE! COFFEE! *worships coffee drinkers* I like Tim Hortons coffee. To quote George of the Jungle: "Javajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajavajava..." HAND!"
|25 Oct 2003|| Frances Monro|
Hmmm, It's good. A lot of work gone into this. *nodnods* I think you're getting into the male mindset a bit better. The comment about shampoo make me chuckle. Good overall pace and plot development. No real nits to pick here. Good work! Sara A. Chow
replies: "No real nitpicks? Ooo wow. Thanks for your comment and advice... and I'm glad you like the shampoo thing (came up in the middle of computer class...). HAND!"
|1 Dec 2003|| Ray Valen|
*wonders what to start talking about, theres so much. This promisis to be a long comment*
Ahem! *clears throat* Carter reminds me so much of me! The bathroom scene! Listen to this, I cant remember where I heard it, but : "The average man has 6 items in the bathroom; soap, shampoo, razor, towel, sponge and shaving cream. The average woman has two hundred. Men wouldn't be able to identify half."
My mom and sister uses that liqued soap. The other day I wanted to shower and went into a frenzy because I couldn't find the soap. I went to my mom and she pointed out about 5 cans of so-called soap. I told hr thats not soap, its cream. Hmmm, not to mention the roughly 10 different shampoos, each for a different facet of your hair. One is enough for me.
And I am in the Southern hemisphere, so its the summer holidays here! And happy birthday for the 3rd natassja, I'l try to swing by your shelf. mine was the 23 November.
Umm.... Oh ya, whats up with that fairy! I need to know more! I need the next chapter!
(Yup, there we go with the I's) Sara A. Chow
replies: "*hugs Ray* YOU ARE LIVING PROOF THAT FEMALES ARE INFERIOR FOR THEIR... needs? I don't know. *hugs Ray again* Hehe, that's so awesome. I have maybe 10 items. 200 frigging items. HOW can you use 200 things for a simple shower? *sighs* Happy belated birthday, Ray, my insane friend's birthday is the 22nd. Sweet. I can have more birthday parties for people now. Hehe. Cake. HAND!"
|31 Mar 2004|| Shawn Johnson|
My god you haven't gotten any comments on this story in awhile! Great, I love it. I can't really critisize much on it it was over all wonderful and written very well. -Twitches.- I wanna be as good as you. Sara A. Chow
replies: "Yay for twitching! *twitches*
You think I'm good? Then don't read BoL... it's horribly cliche. But this'll be interesting... just need to expand chapter 5 a bit and post it. It'll be fun.