| 20 Jan 2002 | TwiNked | Loading...Cool story! Reminds me of those old 'chose your own adventure' type books. Great job in second person too; you dont see that too often. | |
| 22 Feb 2002 | Cate Pemble (Goddess of Insanity) | Loading...*Runs away screaming* VAMPIRE AAAAAAAHHHHHHHH AAAHHHHH GET THE STEAKS! | |
| 6 Mar 2002 | An anonemous Iowan | Loading...This story is so gosh darn stupid I just wanna spit...on it....ya....so there.....ya....bye.... By the way how is beef going to get rid of a vampire (you spelled stakes steaks  | |
| 28 Mar 2002 | Drew | Loading...*blink* *blink*It was really good th second time(I didn't) understand the first time)oh well but it was really cool and Mr.I'm really smart Iowan lern to read good stuff and insult well | |
| 17 May 2002 | Matthew Hart Akers | Loading...the Iowen is a moron. This is very difficult to write, 2nd person is. I liked the style, but it seemed like it rushed through some things that it shouldn't have, when he was dying. I think a little more description, you know... | |
| 24 Jun 2002 | David Grant | Loading...-grins- really, really nice job of dialogue. . . Even better in the depiction of vampires being grotesque, yet beautiful creatures. : ) | |
| 23 Sep 2002 | Lucian Castille | Loading...I like this. It is well worded, although I thought the end lacked subtlety. | |
| 15 Jan 2003 | Mous, Anon O. | Loading...A few comments for the commenteers and one for the writer: - what would an 'Iowan' as said party describes oneself, know about beef? - Steaks played an important part in many a vampire book. I remember one particular book involving a cat and animal friends.
Sharon: Second person writing is one of the most difficult. Fitting a story into a paragraph is doubly so. Nicely written and 'Yol Bolsun'. | |
| 18 Apr 2003 | Bridget L. Duncan | Loading...that was unexpected. You descibe it real well. you write so goood. | |
| 19 Jul 2006 | Horror | Loading...Iowan is stupid,your story was ace, an he doesnt know anything about beef,(or insulting). Steak was useed in many a story to lure the vampire in an stuff like that. I cant beleive he didnt like your story, or is it a she? She probably hasnt read a vampire story before, lol she's sooo sad, not reading one of the best tipes of story at all! | |